Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Over The Hills and Far Away - Ch 7

Monday, March 20, 2006

Set after OIS. Much to Inara’s chagrin, Mal accepts a job offer that takes Serenity far away from New Melbourne and to an unremarkable moon called Three Hills... The crew of Serenity has a fun artistic excursion, Book contemplates his life, Wash still doesn't know what to do about Zoe's birthday, and Inara finds that the line between her preasent and her past is blurrier than ever. And then there's Jayne.... (plus, really long author's note -- this chapter is not so monsterously long as it seems, I swear)

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Ch 7

Early to sleep, early to rise. It was a lesson that Book has learned from both of his Fathers. He blinked groggily, pushing the crust out of the corner of his eyes. Serenity didn’t sound right. She was relatively silent when he woke on most days, though he had been known to here the echoes of the captain’s footfalls now and again. Book sat up, trying to distinguish all the voices floating into the room. There was Simon, Zoe, Mal. He could hear the gruff drawl that was Jayne, the sing-song timbre that was Kaylee.

Book consulted a clock. Sighing, he rose to his feet, quickly pulling his hair back as her opened the cabin door. All six members of Serenity’s crew were gathered in the cargo bay, all wearing thick boots and thick jackets, save Simon, who stood before them with his arms crossed over his chest. River was there too, also dressed to face the cold, sitting on a crate several feet away.

“May I ask what you’re doing up at this hour?” he said, making his presence known. “It’s only three hours into the day.”

“See? It’s three,” Mal echoed, taking an aggressive step towards Simon. “You delay us any longer with your yòu zhì mán bù ‘bout River getting caught, then she surely will be.”

Raising her eyebrow, Zoe turned to Mal. “We’re ‘bout to leave for a job, Shepard. Should be back by ‘bout sunrise.”

“’Cept me,” Jayne threw in quickly. A smug grim spread across his face. “I’m stayin’ in town an gettin’ me some whores.”

Wash let out an exasperated sigh. “You really think that there are whores here?”

Jayne reached inside his coat pocket and pulled out his orange and yellow knitted hat. “Where there’s dirt,” he said, putting on his head with pride, “there’s whores.”

Book stood quietly, watching as they resumed their quarrel. Mal and Simon spat words at each other. Kaylee tried her best by interjecting small chides at each of them, but she couldn’t make them stop. Wash made a snide remark about Jayne, tossing it right over the taller man’s head. Zoe stepped in, chastising Wash for

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 20 March 2006 21:58
I like the tension that you are creating around Inara in regards to Abaddon. It's developing a seam around her that just seems ready to be ripped away to help your story go even further.

love it so far!

syzg
Monday, 20 March 2006 22:21
>Simon and Kaylee: Will Kaylee really march down to the infirmary to try to tell the doctor how she really feels?

I certainly hope so :)

>Will Simon reciprocate, or will he pull a Simon and screw it up?

He'll probably screw it up. He never got it right until the movie...unless this story completely discounts it...then, well. . . naw, he's too mad. Though, when people are mad they tend to say things they wouldn't normally have said to begin with...maybe I'll hold out hope that he doesn't screw it up....

Am looking forward to the next chapter.
Tuesday, 21 March 2006 00:25
I enjoyed this, especially the last part with Inara almost revealing too much at Kaylee's innocent question. It certainly was one of the oddest jobs the crew has ever been paid for though. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 21 March 2006 00:28
Ohhhhhhhhhhh the angst!! love love love it!!

This part made my heart ache, and brought leeeetle tiny tears to my eyes:

In between both of them, Inara had gone still. Never talking about Abaddon... if she ever needed to, Inara knew that she could tell Kaylee about Abaddon. She could probably even tell Mal about Abaddon, if the time ever came when she had no choice, but… but the year that followed, the year after Abaddon… She took a large, deep breath, pushing it all back. She saw Kaylee’s eyebrows begin to furrow at Inara’s slight breech of character. She felt Mal, infinitely more astute than he ever admitted, stop looking at her with horror. She felt his blue eyes shift from a gaze of betrayal and judgment to a gaze of concern.

Have I mentioned how much I love this story?? Can't wait for the next part. ;)

Jenn
Tuesday, 21 March 2006 11:30
This chapter worked really well with all the varied character interactions. It also had just the right mix of current events and memories with the odd hint of many unanswered questions. I am very much looking forward to reading the next part.

You write a beautiful Inara.
Tuesday, 21 March 2006 12:51
I'm very glad that my hapless comments are appreciated. *g*

Wonderful job, again, on the original characters. From Gilbert slowly warming up to Adelina... (And yes, Jayne/Whore is a great pairing. Not greater, though, than Mal/Inara, hehe.) I adore Gilbert about as much as I despise Heather and this little petty job of theirs. Such a great way of showing the conflicts of philosophy both in and between the people on board. Are childish pranks the right way to defend one's believe system? Or is it kind of pathetic? I love that aspect of the story.

And oh. The. Heartbreak. I have a huge crush on the Abbadon storyline. I want to know more. Every hint so far points to delicious tragedy.

And Mal's reaction, so well described with just a few visuals.

And what's up with Woo? And Aiko Sato? And everything? What do you MEAN no new part until the 30th? *g*
Tuesday, 21 March 2006 18:27
Jayne reached inside his coat pocket and pulled out his orange and yellow knitted hat. “Where there’s dirt,” he said, putting on his head with pride, “there’s whores.”- This line is so Jayne, I laughed out right at it! And yes, I too enjoy Jayne and a whore!

Innocent questions always stir up the most trouble. I can't wait to read Inara's heartache and oh Simon and Kaylee! I know he's mad, and a fool, but for the love of god, give him one moment of clarity, please!

Can't wait to read your next post, and take your time writing, we'll wait patiently!

Wednesday, 22 March 2006 04:36
Arcadia,

Another wonderful chapter full of on-character dialogue and interpersonal angst!

However....I think that the thoughts by Inara on Companions and marriage when asked about it by Kaylee (especially how things could have gone differently for Inara's mom) could have been stretched a little more. More character-defining tension;)

But still....I am seriously awaiting some more of this fic. The 30th cannot come soon enough.

BEB
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 27 April 2006 22:31
I really like how you included more of the cast and the small personality telling interactions they had. I kinda feel like Zoe is a bit too cold. I remember her hard but warm.
Also, I hate to be a stickler but you should have someone edit your work. There are frequest typos that make it harder to read (this really good story) smoothly.
Don't stop. Each post is better than the last.

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