Ch 5
February 14, 2507. Sihnon. House Madrassa, bedchamber of Inara Serra.
Time had gone from being Layla Serra's enemy to her dear friend. As she zoned in and out of listening to her mother's lecture, Inara could not keep herself from marveling at how different the woman before her was from the one Inara remembered in her youth. The most obvious difference was the clothes. Layla Serra wore much finer garments now, much more fitting of the class to which she now aspired. There were advantages to having a companion has a daughter, including an almost instant rise in class. Layla had been milking every moment of it for the last five months. She attended dinners, bought herself feathered hats and studded purses, indulged in anti-aging treatments and days at the spa. "… please, Inara, assure me that you'll be taking another client soon."
The words intruded upon Inara's reverie. She looked up at her mother with heavy eyes. "I'm ill," she said quietly. She was. Her ailment had struck her without warning nearly two weeks before. The fever, than the dizziness and the nausea, then muscle aches, double vision, occasional shortness of breath… She was recovering now, but for days she had dreaded leaving her bed for anything. "I will take another client when I am feeling better."
"Inara…" The older Serra rose from the corner of Inara's bed, where she had been sitting for the better part of an hour. Inara watched as Layla paced the room, stop every so often to rub her hand across the surface of Inara's curtains or to admire herself in Inara's mirror. Inara could see how the environment rattled her, just a little, how it made her lose control just a little. Inara couldn't blame her. Layla Serra was living in her dream world. At first, it had been heart-warming, knowing that she had given her mother what she had always… but now, it was something else. Inara studied her mother's back as Layla traced the expression of the Buddha statue in Inara's corner. "A companion not working on St. Valentine's…" Layla trailed of
I love-love-loved the way you had Mal listening to the mmusic because that's like poetry set in tone and Mal's all about the poetry in things, even if he pretends he's not, and it was just plain gorgeous.
I loved the idea of Inara's heart making itself visible (audible?) through the music, and the fact that Mal GETS it.
"and her heart was wild, it was wounded, it was gentle, proud, it was..."
Beautiful.
The whole "..." trailing off bit was perhaps used a bit often in this chapter, but in most cases it was a very effective way of capturing the impossibility of putting things into even thoughts.
Inara's half-memory of Sihnon and Abaddon... my curiosity is piked. Like mad! *g*
Oh, and yes, the ending scene in the sunset was really well done. I could perfectly visualize it and you kept that somewhat removed mood from the piano music going, filling the silence between them. And yes, the jacket thing is totally one of the few romantic gestures that will never get old! *g*
I am so excited about this story. I love it and every new chapter!
Really well written with some beautiful scenes.
Thanks,
Taya
...Also, PANTS (That will never be unfunny!)
m4p
Sighing with happy thoughts....
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