Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Core of the Matter, Part 3

Tuesday, March 7, 2006

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3307    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The stench of rank human sweat was only sweetened by the spilled alcohol in which they seemed to christen themselves. It was a rim moon way station, frequented by those who would only stay long enough to find another berth or to fuel their ship and go. A couple of long-term buskers had popped up, spaced here and there between ships. A few permanent buildings had cropped up, but most dwellings were prefabricated or converted cargo sheds.

One such cargo shed had been outfitted with tables and massive amounts of alcohol. Exactly the sort of place that saw the most traffic of human bodies through the fueling station.

“No! Not at all. I just wish I knew how to do things like you, taking things apart and being able to put them back together again. I tried to do a paper model once and it was a disaster. I think I got an infection from a paper cut.” Lien downed a small glass of clear liquid and placed it back in a line of others. The table was littered with them. Only half of them stood upright. A few rolled around the floor at their feet.

“But you gotta admit, sitting around all day and making decisions that can affect hundreds of jobs...” Kaylee looks up and points to a blank space, “Your report’s late. You’re fired!” She giggled and took a sip of her own drink.

Barely touched, Zoe’s drink was being nursed slowly. Her eyes kept drifting off to the corner of the room where the Jayne had convinced two girls to join them. One was attached to Jayne, the other trying to sidle up to the Captain. He seemed to be chatting her up amiably enough but the girl was reading much more into it than there actually was.

Zoe took another measured sip from her drink, giving the appearance of sociability without succumbing to the effects of the alcohol. “I don’t think the power of being able to starve hundreds or thousands of families is all that funny.”

“She’s right,” Lien sobered quickly enough. “I had to cut costs one time by shutting down an entire factory. It took over a year for some of those pe

Comments
Tuesday, 07 March 2006 05:56
You have really captured the characters here. I love the exchange between Mal, Jayne, and Zoe after Mal punches the guy. I can really imagine them saying those lines. I can't wait to read more!
Tuesday, 07 March 2006 06:08
Nice work Kaele. Keep it up lol.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 07 March 2006 06:32

I rate this a 10! Alright Kaele, are you sure you haven't studied under Joss, you know gone to one of those writer's conference thingys he does. Because this is outstanding. Particularly the dialogue. Loved Mal's Chinese parable to the guy and loved Jayne's line about "more friends they have." This is very Fireflyesque.

Ok, I'm ready to find out what happened to the lady.... I'm waitin'!
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 07 March 2006 06:33
Damn, it put my comment under anonymous... i'm me, gorramnit.

It's me Diane, Kaele, I did post!!!!!
Tuesday, 07 March 2006 06:35
I was a Guest... that is what happened.

Hmpfff.

I came by and said the above.

:)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 07 March 2006 12:34
Wow this one's fun - even got FollowMal to forget her own name! Keep this one going ok?
Tuesday, 07 March 2006 12:37
of fer chrissake. That was me. oldfogey.
Thursday, 09 March 2006 19:58
Punch 'em again Mal!

...I mean...

Good work! Keep it up.

Whew, got caught up in the story!

Thursday, 09 March 2006 22:15
Wheeee! Our BDHs in trouble again?

Very fun and interesting. I can hardly wait for more.

The characterization is spot on!
Monday, 13 March 2006 21:54
Good bar fight, excellent one liners! I can totally picture it.

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