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Waited Long Enough - Part Eleven: Fancy Feast

Wednesday, March 1, 2006

Jayne and Kaylee have had twenty-four wild hours alone together on Serenity. Now Mal's back and definitely suspicious. Count on River to see the truth. NC17 for brief references to adult situations.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3590    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer: Not mine, no money. Thanks to Joss et al, Goddess Jacqui for beta and courage, to my own Big, Bad Man for indulging me, and to all of you who read this first attempt at fanfic. If this section is your first read, please back up to Part One and read it all the way through. It's been fun, in fact, so much fun, I'll probably do it again. Please comment below, rate the darn thing or e-mail me at Lumenea@aol.com.

Waited Long Enough Part Eleven: Fancy Feast

Right on schedule the following afternoon, Mal, Zoë and Wash pulled the ‘mule’ up into Serenity’s cargo bay and began to unload the freight and supplies they’d picked up. Mal lifted a crate and passed it to Wash as he speculated, “Guess Kaylee’s got her overhaul all done. Might as well cut her loose for awhile, that is if Jayne ain’t throttled her yet. Wasn’t exactly thrilled when I ordered him to stick close by, help her if she needed it. Man’s been prickly as a porcupine of late.”

“Here, Sweetie.” Wash grinned wryly and handed the crate to Zoë, who stowed it with the others. “Just goes to show what sexual abstinence does to his sunny temperament. Give him twenty four hours in town and he’ll be the charming, personable mercenary we all know and love.”

Zoë snorted. Jayne, charming and personable? It would take more than a trim to accomplish that sort of transformation. “Husband, you’ve lost your mind.” She just shook her head.

After tossing his duffel into his quarters, the Captain found his mechanic and her helper back in the ship’s engine room, cleaning up the hydraulic fluid residue spilled when Jayne had accidentally stripped the coupling. Most of the mess had dripped through to the under grating trays and Jayne had pulled up the floor grid so he could mop up the oily mess.

Kaylee sat cross-legged half under Serenity’s engine, with her toolbox by her knee, her lower lip nipped between her teeth in concentration as she worked at removing the stripped coupling from the supply hose. There were parts and connectors an’ bits

Comments
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 22:09
tee-hee.
Very shiny.
Maybe there could be one more- with the crew finding out.
I especially want to see Mal's reaction as he leads Jayne to the airlock by the ear.

But regardless of whether there's more I loved this. Keep writing.
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 22:16
Shiny!!

Jayne just pussy-footing around, trying nor to let anyone kow what happened between him and Kaylee.....

And Kaylee trying not to look at Jayne....

Then River walks in, and withina few seconds knows EXACTLY what went on - right on the kitchen table, where Mal is sitting!

Tee-hee1 That's hi-larious!!! So Shiny!!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 02 March 2006 00:05
KEEP WRITING...PLEASE!
Thursday, 02 March 2006 04:02
You can't leave it there. I want Crew Reaction, dammit! ;P

I love the tip-toeing around, and that awareness of each other, even when they're not looking. All that tangible tension makin' Mal all twitchy. Wonderful stuff.

Putting in a request for one more chapter... maybe even two...
Thursday, 02 March 2006 05:57
"finger food... best enjoyed by connoiseurs!"
Wicked wonderful! Ten points to River, Foul to Wash for his cooking, and a time-out for our clueless captain.
Love it!
Thursday, 02 March 2006 06:41
*giggleness*

River was so hilarious!

And I love the tension and knowing looks between Jayne and Kaylee. Really, just perfect!
Thursday, 02 March 2006 12:23
*chuckles* I love River with the raw & juicy finger food! Mal not having a clue is so typical.

"Jayne focused on his cup, takin’ slow sips an' trying not to look too much at Kaylee. It was kinda like tryin’ not to look into the sun." Great description.

Thursday, 02 March 2006 15:01
OK Guys, ya made me a happy camper with such great feedback. So glad ya enjoyed my first efforts.

More coming, in the form of several short bits set in the next few weeks,following this story, so hang in there with me.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 02 March 2006 16:48
SO GLAD YOUR'RE WRITIG MORE !
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 03 March 2006 14:57
Yeah, it's just not complete withouth the crew finding out. We'd be letting you off way too easy.....
Friday, 03 March 2006 16:02
Patience, folks. Remember, all good things come to those who wait. Jayne got lucky after all... maybe you will, too!

WINTERHART
Wednesday, 08 March 2006 00:11
This is such a good story!! You get Jayne and Kaylee right down pat, it's just perfect!
I can't wait for more, I really can't :D
MAZZSHINY
Monday, 21 May 2007 17:11
ok im a long time after everyone else reading this, well over a year actually! but can i just say it its incredible. gotta be the best fic ive read so far! loved every chapter!!
Monday, 21 May 2007 19:12
Hey, mazzshiny - thanks for your kind comments on this, my first-ever fanfic.

When they've been out there for awhile, they begin to feel a bit like lost children and it's always gratifying when a reader takes the time and makes the effort to let you know someone's still reading 'em and they enjoyed your work.

Lucky you --- there's a WHOLE LOT MORE where this came from!

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