EXT. ZOE’S MOON – NIGHT
Serenity flies over the ocean, driving up, higher and higher, pursued by an ALLIANCE GUNSHIP. The gunship’s fire appears to be directed more toward near-misses than hits.
INT. SERENITY – COCKPIT – SAME TIME
Wash is at the controls, Zoe and Mal behind him.
WASH
They haven’t hit us yet. That’s a good thing.
ZOE
They’re herding us.
EXT. ZOE’S MOON – NIGHT
In the distance, two more gunships join the first. With three of them firing, Serenity’s mobility is seriously impaired.
INT. SERENITY – GALLEY – NIGHT
Kaylee, Simon, Inara, and Book quickly clear the kitchen table while the deck rolls under them. River is still sitting, sort of in the middle of things, and Jayne stands near the forward entrance, looking around nervously.
BOOK
Best we get this all away as quickly as possible.
Simon, a plate of food in his hand, approaches Kaylee.
SIMON
Kaylee, I—
She doesn’t look up, just steps around him.
The ship shudders. Plates and cups skitter on the table. Everyone reaches for something to steady themselves.
JAYNE
(nervous)
What was that? We get hit?
BOOK
Don’t think so, son.
KAYLEE
Just breakin’ atmo, I think.
EXT. SPACE
Serenity sails through the black, leaving the blue orb of Zoe’s Moon behind. The three gunships follow, bracketing it in, driving it in a particular direction.
INT. SERENITY – COCKPIT – SAME TIME
Mal leans anxiously over Wash’s shoulder.
WASH
Back off. I need a little more room to maneuver.
EXT. SPACE – SAME TIME
Serenity pulls away from the gunships. As it does, an Alliance patrol boat sweeps in from the right.
INT. ALLIANCE PATROL BOAT – BRIDGE – SAME TIME
Chien looks at Serenity’s flank as his ship approaches. Wallace is not on the bridge.
CHIEN
Steady. Just close enough to rattle them.
(beat)
Wallace?
WALLACE (OS)
(via the comm)
On the way, sir.
INT. SERENITY – COCKPIT – SAME TIME
Wash sits calmly, steering the ship, Mal and Zoe st
This is great- like the end of an Inspector Gadget with Claws saying "I'll get you next time Gadget!"
Truly brilliant!!
Have you considered creating a Podcast reading or Radio dramatization of your scripts?
Thanks!
You can't take the sky from me
I've really enjoyed all of the episodes so far and look forward to many more.
Inara coming on to Mal- about bloody time!
I agree with other comments- the scope of your verse is enormous. Props for vision.
Negatives: Dialogue can be trite. Simon, Kaylee, Book and Wash are underdone. Don't buy that Mal would go to Inara at the end like that (and not say anything!), if there's a chance to be heroical elsewhere. And the Alliance look so lame in this. You can just imagine them bumbling in their little hats...
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