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Virtual Firefly episode 1x19 (act four)

Thursday, January 26, 2006

“The Perfect Sunset” (act four): This is the fourth episode of the Virtual Firefly project. Check out our web site at stillflying.net!

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3418    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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EXT. ZOE’S MOON – NIGHT

Serenity flies over the ocean, driving up, higher and higher, pursued by an ALLIANCE GUNSHIP. The gunship’s fire appears to be directed more toward near-misses than hits.

INT. SERENITY – COCKPIT – SAME TIME

Wash is at the controls, Zoe and Mal behind him.

WASH

They haven’t hit us yet. That’s a good thing.

ZOE

They’re herding us.

EXT. ZOE’S MOON – NIGHT

In the distance, two more gunships join the first. With three of them firing, Serenity’s mobility is seriously impaired.

INT. SERENITY – GALLEY – NIGHT

Kaylee, Simon, Inara, and Book quickly clear the kitchen table while the deck rolls under them. River is still sitting, sort of in the middle of things, and Jayne stands near the forward entrance, looking around nervously.

BOOK

Best we get this all away as quickly as possible.

Simon, a plate of food in his hand, approaches Kaylee.

SIMON

Kaylee, I—

She doesn’t look up, just steps around him.

The ship shudders. Plates and cups skitter on the table. Everyone reaches for something to steady themselves.

JAYNE

(nervous)

What was that? We get hit?

BOOK

Don’t think so, son.

KAYLEE

Just breakin’ atmo, I think.

EXT. SPACE

Serenity sails through the black, leaving the blue orb of Zoe’s Moon behind. The three gunships follow, bracketing it in, driving it in a particular direction.

INT. SERENITY – COCKPIT – SAME TIME

Mal leans anxiously over Wash’s shoulder.

WASH

Back off. I need a little more room to maneuver.

EXT. SPACE – SAME TIME

Serenity pulls away from the gunships. As it does, an Alliance patrol boat sweeps in from the right.

INT. ALLIANCE PATROL BOAT – BRIDGE – SAME TIME

Chien looks at Serenity’s flank as his ship approaches. Wallace is not on the bridge.

CHIEN

Steady. Just close enough to rattle them.

(beat)

Wallace?

WALLACE (OS)

(via the comm)

On the way, sir.

INT. SERENITY – COCKPIT – SAME TIME

Wash sits calmly, steering the ship, Mal and Zoe st

Comments
Thursday, 26 January 2006 09:35
GHA! why! why! why!? They were so close, so close! and then the ground had to stop swaying and the world had to seem normal again. Gha! i am so hooked! i love mal inara! Can't they just kiss or something before she gose away, cause i am not sure i can handle so much angst! Good its like your heart would be tearing just from how achingly beautiful they can be together...they have there moments. please wite more
Thursday, 26 January 2006 11:10
Excellent conclusion!
Thursday, 26 January 2006 13:22
I'm beyond speechless!
This is great- like the end of an Inspector Gadget with Claws saying "I'll get you next time Gadget!"

Truly brilliant!!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 26 January 2006 14:28
Just wanted to let you know that I enjoy this story very much. I just had one question. Is this series leading up to the BDM or is it something on it's own?
Thursday, 26 January 2006 14:46
It's leading up to the BDM and beyond
NGUYENTRANLOC
Thursday, 26 January 2006 15:55
Great Episode! Enjoyed reading it very much. Are Chien and Wallace gonna be your big bads for season 1?
Thursday, 26 January 2006 17:08
As I've said before...Your feeding my Firefly "Fix". Great Job!

Have you considered creating a Podcast reading or Radio dramatization of your scripts?

Thanks!
Thursday, 26 January 2006 18:00
Terrific stuff, if only they could stay safe and protected inside those gorram rings but our BDHs have to come out some time. I am hoping and praying that River gets a bit more lucid and helpful, also that Inara and Mal drop the pretence and tell each other how they feel. Simon keeps putting his foot in it so it isn't only the Captain who can't seem to say a thing right to his lady. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 26 January 2006 20:08
Again, great job. Wonderful ending, all around. I especially am enjoying the growing tension between Mal and Inara, as well as the surprising revelation of Zoe thinking about leaving the ship--interesting direction to take things. Looking forward to more.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 27 January 2006 18:10
I would like to thank all of you for undertaking such an ambitious project!

I've really enjoyed all of the episodes so far and look forward to many more.
Sunday, 29 January 2006 02:57
Sorry, I didn't really like this episode. It just seemed too disjunct for me. I've really enjoyed your past projects to date so this was kind of a disappointment for me. Sorry if I'm the only voice of disension but I only want you guys to be better.
Wednesday, 08 February 2006 08:09
Positives: Enjoyed the light and shade factor- These characters are best in long scenes where they're either slogging it out or having a laugh. How cool is Zoe?- we know she is the real boss.
Inara coming on to Mal- about bloody time!
I agree with other comments- the scope of your verse is enormous. Props for vision.
Negatives: Dialogue can be trite. Simon, Kaylee, Book and Wash are underdone. Don't buy that Mal would go to Inara at the end like that (and not say anything!), if there's a chance to be heroical elsewhere. And the Alliance look so lame in this. You can just imagine them bumbling in their little hats...

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