Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

A Lasting Impression

Sunday, January 15, 2006

Jaylee. A rewrite of my earlier fic "Impression". Longer and (hopefully) better.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3626    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Me, I can’t just leave well enough alone. Like our dear Miss Frye, I just had ta tinker with it some, make it run smoother.

A LASTING IMPRESSION

Part One – Masculine Wiles

They didn’t meet straight off.

Kaylee’d stepped down into the cargo bay, just in time to see his back end goin’ out t’wards the kitchen. All she could tell from the glimpse she got was that he weren’t average-sized none.

“Man’s hungry,” the Captain commented, nodding at the doorway. “Ain’t been eaten fit servin’s for a month or more.” There was a pause before he added dryly, “Don’t seem none the worse for it though. Still the biggest, meanest gorram tracker I ever saw.”

Kaylee didn’t much like the sound of that. Big an’ mean weren’t her cup of oolong. She knew there had to be a grain o’ truth to what he said on account that Mal didn’t hardly lie to her, and that he’d specifically been on the lookout for some extra muscle since he got shot up on Whitefall a while back, but she weren’t one to make assumptions ‘bout how someone ought to be took on first appearance.

She reckoned to follow said tracker to see for herself.

He whipped ‘round from starin’ all lost-like at the table when she come in behind, and she gasped like she’d had her breath knocked clean out, her eyes eating him up like she was the one starvin’.

Sweet Buddha, but he was swai. Taller’n her pa and built real solid, the sort her dear ol’ grandmammy would’ve called ‘a strapping lad’. Not that he was laddish in any way. No, this specimen was every inch a man.

Thick muscles rippled and rolled along his tanned arms, stretched out the chest and shoulders of his tight blue T-shirt like they had a life of their own. Her gaze shifted from the breadth of that undulatin’ landscape down a trim middle and long, powerful legs, takin’ in with awe how the gunstrap ‘round his thigh was stretched taut with the strain of holdin’ on. Though, why that spectacle brought to mind memories of Uncle Deak’s prize bull was a mite inexplicable...

He cleared his throat and h

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 15 January 2006 11:33
Umm... That was mighty nice! Mighty nice indeed!
Sunday, 15 January 2006 11:35
oh, oh...all kinds of lovely:)

you just made my morning!

I always laugh when someone asks me why Jayne is my favorite FF/S character...the next time they do, I'll simply direct them to your mindblowing description;)
Sunday, 15 January 2006 14:25
Fan-rittin'-tastic, CantonHeroine!

Love the way you've added to and embellished this story, from before....

Hope you're going to continue? Pretty Please?

I love Jaylee fanfic, especially the frilly, fluffy kind.. just like Kaylee herself!!
GRIMSONG
Sunday, 15 January 2006 14:33
Great story! You really captured the characters well.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 15 January 2006 15:49
a lovely, delicious breakfast treat!

nice character voices
Sunday, 15 January 2006 16:27
Mmmm. Jaylee.

I... I... I have the strangest urge to bop Mal right in the nose. Right, smack dab in the middle of the nose. Grrrrr.

But to everything else? *sigh* Yes, very well done. I liked it then and I like it now.
Sunday, 15 January 2006 18:12
*strangles mal* why??? why why why?!?

b
Sunday, 15 January 2006 22:29
SQUEEEEEEEE!!!!!!

That was lovely. Just all sorts of loving wonderfulness. I'm a firm believer that there was a wealth of attraction between Jayne and Kaylee when he came aboard...cause why wouldn't there be?...and something had to have happened for things to be the way they were in the pilot.

Can't wait for the rest!
Monday, 16 January 2006 13:00
Love the additions and the embellishments. Yay Jaylee.

"He surrounded her like a protective wrapper, held her tender and rinsed her hand under the cool stream like it was a delicate china cup, payin’ no heed whatever to the grease stains under her nails."

I liked this line and Captain Pushypants especially.

ANONYMOUS
Monday, 16 January 2006 16:42
I do so love your writing style and your view of the Firefly verse. The speech, body language and personalities you put to "paper" are a joy to read and make it seem as though we are right there with them. Please keep them coming, esp. Jaylee stories. Thanks!
Sunday, 29 January 2006 05:03
Jayne absently rubbed a trickling bead of sweat into the skin of his belly. He noticed the little mechanic’s eyes followin’ the motion and moved his fingers down further, slithering along the hairline to the waist of his pants. He toyed with the button there, watching her face for a reaction.


<Gulp>Ummmm more of that. Purely for educational purposes. Academic interest, yeah that's it.

Tuesday, 02 May 2006 17:16
That was nice. I usually don't go for this pairing... nor any really, but I like your style and you do capture the characters. Good work.

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