Shiny New Toys 5: All Kinds O' Stubborn
Friday, December 30, 2005
Kaylee ain't dead yet, but Mal picks a poor time for a command decision. Everybody else just watches the fireworks.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 4021 RATING: 9.0 (G) SERIES: FIREFLY
A/N: Throw in the standard disclaimers.
Man, I gotta figure out how to horse this sumbitch back to humor, or at least porn. Drama isn't my game. Any ideas?
In the meantime, enjoy self-righteous Mal vs. strung-out Simon. At least they have Zoe to referee.
*****
Wash had never managed to get the ship into the air so fast. Mal had been talking to him all the way back from the Alliance substation, and he lifted off as soon as the last person touched the deck, even before the cargo doors had finished closing. Despite his calls for a status update, Wash had been ignored as everyone - including Inara and River, who had been waiting on the catwalk - made a beeline for the common room and infirmary. Simon was the first one in, grabbing up the gloves and supplies prepared ahead of time as Jayne carefully set Kaylee on the exam bed. Without even an apologetic look to Inara, Simon cut the shoulder of Kaylee's dress and began to apply a dressing to her burn.
Mal was seething as he watched. This was the second time the gorram doctor had brought injury down on little Kaylee, and that was two times too many. Mal had let the first one slide, as Serenity had needed a doctor and Simon hadn't known any better. But this one was different. Simon knew to stay on the boat, and he left anyway. It didn't matter that Kaylee and Inara had prodded him into it. The Tams were simply too much of a liability to keep around any longer. He hadn't been kidding when he'd wanted to leave Simon to the Alliance - only Zoe mentioning River had changed his mind. But now that the Doctor was back in one piece, it was well past time to cut them both loose. But first, he had more pressing issues to address.
"What's the story?" he stood in the doorway to the infirmary, the rest of the crew gathered behind him, as Simon hooked Kaylee to the monitors. To all outward appearance, the captain looked relaxed, but Zoe's eyes narrowed anyway. Mal was actually very tense, and that was usually a bad sign for whoever he was angry wi
How should I end this series?
A) Kill 'em all. Taking a page from the movie, nothing jacks up the suspense like knocking off a character or two. Who should go?
1) Kaylee dies
2) Kaylee dies. Depressed, Simon poisons himself and dies. Kaylee miraculously recovers 2 minutes later, only to find her lover dead, whereupon she poisons herself and dies again. River decides 'Romeo and Juliet' is way overrated.
3) River flips out, killing everyone aboard
4) Wash is distracted while ogling Zoe and crashes the ship into a moon, killing everyone aboard
5) Something involving Jayne, a grenade, and the word "oops", killing everyone aboard
6) Anything that leads to the phrase "explosive decompression"
B) Fluff. Because they're all just hopeless romantics at heart. Except Jayne. He's badass.
1) Simon saves Kaylee, they declare their mutual love, and live happily ever after with many fat babies
2) Mal and Inara finally knock it off and do it already, and live happily ever after with many fat babies
3) River coerces Jayne into kissing on the mouth, and they live happily ever after with many fat babies
4) Mal coerces Simon into kissing on the mouth. Kaylee runs to Inara for comfort. Jayne sells the video, making Serenity the richest ship in the 'verse
C) Angst ahoy! Nothing's more fun than our heroes in pain!
1) Annoyed at his penchant for being kidnapped, Mal kicks Simon off the ship. Kaylee pines away. By chance they meet years later, older and wiser
2) Seeing how dangerous he is, Simon refuses Kaylee and leaves with River. Kaylee pines away. By chance they meet years later, older and wiser
3) Steal the plot from any daytime soap and change the names where appropriate. Mention something about "older and wiser"
4) Screw angst. See Choice A above
D) Porn. Lots and lots of porn.
1) Simon saves Kaylee, and he finally does what he should have done somewhere around "Jaynestown".
2) Same as Choice 1, but with River providing amusing commentary
3) Hell with this. Orgy in the cargo bay!
E) WTF? plots. Odd plot bunnies that hopped into my brain while I was totally drunk.
1) Evil Simon arrives from an alternate dimension and kidnaps Kaylee. While the crew plots a rescue, Kaylee develops a very creepy Stockholm Syndrome
2) River reveals she's not actually Simon's sister. With the taboo gone, all that subtext takes a turn towards NC-17
3) Inara reveals she actually is Mal's sister. Mal is too pent up to care.
4) Zoe is pregnant. With Jayne's child. It's all very complicated.
5) It's revealed that the crew of Serenity are just puppets for the amusement of Wash's dinosaurs.
Don't worry. I'll try to get this thing back around to sweet and fluffy in an episode or two.
Then everyone has many fat babies?
You're actually quite good at the drama.
Relic, too lazy to sign in. Love yer stuff.
Happy and smutty, dangit! Not angst and killing. Good Lord, man, we've got Joss for that. ;)
Second, you've got a great suspense situation going here, a great possible action set with an assult on the neurology ward of on of Persophene's hospitals... Give me more.
Third, even after Simon manages to get Kaylee back to rights, there is going to be a long convalesence during which he will have all manner of opportunity to put his foot in his mouth with halarity, porn, or both ensuing.
Just my two bits,
Keep flying,
and... oh yeah... KEEP WRITING
-goblueguy
But, i'll also be happy with B1.
You may see yourself as being poor with the drama but so far the story is tight and the wit is crunchy with a chocolaty center. I actually enjoy seeing Simon stand up to Mal. Ya gotta have balls to accomplish what Simon has, I find it infinitely annoying that he is played as an utter milquetoast.
Seriously though, I almost wet myself reading your survey, and I happen to think you do a wonderful job at drama :)
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You are doing a splendid job, I love the drama as much as the fluff, and I can't wait to see how you end it - no matter how, it will be amazing;)
"Might have to put him down."
oh Jayne...(LOVE how you write Jayne)
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