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Shiny New Toys 4: Interrogations

Wednesday, December 28, 2005

Mal goes looking for answers to his missing crew. The Alliance goes looking for answers to their missing River. They find each other instead. Guess what happens?

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3897    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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A/N: I don't own these folks, I just play with them.

I do believe I ripped off most every interrogation scene from every movie you can think of. I'm just not cut out for drama, although it does give sarcastic Simon a chance to play. I also tried to keep the torture aspect low key.

Suggestions on how to make this one better are welcome. I don't feel as satisfied when tackling more serious subject matter.

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Well. Charles had been in the food service industry all his life, and had never seen such a boorishly mannered young man. The boy's audacity was amazing: a wanted fugitive, strolling into the restaurant with his cheap floozy - God, how utterly PLAIN her dress had been - and acting so poorly. It was almost fitting that he'd noticed the man was actually wanted - for murder no less! - and called the police. That would teach uppity lower-class scum like them to keep their place. Charles ran an upscale eatery, after all! He'd even served members of Parliament. There was no room for riff raff here.

So imagine Charles' surprise when the door burst open thirty minutes later, and a burly man with an extremely large firearm came barrelling in. Holding his gun on everyone present, he quickly scanned the room and decided that there was no immediate threat. He turned and yelled "Clear!" back through the door.

This was the signal for three more people to enter. In the lead was an extremely capable-looking woman, holding a scanner in one hand and a well-used shotgun in the other. Cloesly behind her were two more people: a shorter man wearing - of all things - a Shepherd's collar, and a taller man wearing a dusty, knee length coat. Both of them were also armed to the teeth. The woman quickly swept the room with her scanner, and moved to the table that had been the scene of so much drama earlier. "Found it, sir. This is Kaylee's work, no doubt of it." She picked up a small radio from the floor.

The tall man in brown nodded and turned as Charles approached, furious. "What is the meani

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 28 December 2005 05:09
more now please? it's an awesome story, i really like it
Wednesday, 28 December 2005 05:15
Great job. I cant wait to see what goes down next also i loved the fact that mal killed smith before simon could do anything.
Wednesday, 28 December 2005 05:21
Wow, that was fast. I just commented on your last installment when this popped up!
I try to tip big, sir- love it cause I'm a waitress!
And sarcastic Simon is always good!
For a one shot start this is turning into quite the series, great job!:)
Wednesday, 28 December 2005 05:32
Wow, you're quick! I'm really enjoying this! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Wednesday, 28 December 2005 10:48
My favourite bit was Zoe paying that piece of *goushi* Charles by shooting up his till and telling him to keep the change! Loved that to pieces. Of course the rest is mighty fine too. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 28 December 2005 13:24
Simon couldn't help but think that this was getting awfully cliched. Around about this time, the cavalry would assault the walls and draw Smith from the room, allowing Simon time to get his hands free. Simon would of course grab a conveniently misplaced weapon, hunt his captor through the building, ending in a climatic showdown of gunfire and witty reparte. Once the bad guys had been vanquished, he'd return to Kaylee, hoist her over his shoulder, and manfully stride out of the building to the adoring cheers of his friends.

That didn't happen.

I lmao. Classic
Wednesday, 28 December 2005 13:45
Keep going. I loved it, but I can't stand suspense.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 28 December 2005 13:52
ah man... what started out so neat and fun got so serious, please tell me you're planning on getting them together by the end of it.... :S
Wednesday, 28 December 2005 23:13
So good! I really loved Simon imagining his "Die Hard" situation, should he take matters into his own hands :) Please tell this story's gonna have a happy ending?
Thursday, 29 December 2005 00:41
- Mighty generous with the payment, Zoe. Buckshot ain't cheap.
- I try to tip big, sir.

that woman's a waitress's dream...

b
Wednesday, 04 January 2006 07:49
Zoe is hilarious.

I think you tackled the subject manner fine given the scope of this story - you don't need anything drawn out with painful, bloody details of the torture and having Simon remark upon the sitatuon in his mind was a nice touch.
Thursday, 23 February 2006 19:13
Gotta love them thrillin' heroics!
Tuesday, 03 October 2006 22:18
hiding their kneecaps! OMG! Such a great Book line!

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