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Pretty Fits: part 4

Friday, December 23, 2005

Sorry to make you guys wait! So will the others get Kaylee? And some things happen to make you question....

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A/N: Sorry to make you guys wait. I hope it was worth it. I'm trying to really set up for a whole lotta drama.

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Chapter 4

Mal dipped his head once at Jayne who nodded right back before Mal kicked down the door and they both stormed in, guns drawn and pointed at the four inhabitants of the room.

One man slid back from the table in surprise , where the four men were seated, but Thayer just continued to shuffle his hand of cards coolly before saying, “Well Captain Reynolds, I didn’t send you a WAVE and you certainly didn’t send me one, so you can understand as to why I’m a little upset by this, how shall we say, unfriendly disturbance.”

Thayer looked at Mal patronizingly.

“I like my entrances to make a statement.” Mal quipped with a humorous shrug of the shoulders.

One of Thayer’s men stood and shoved his chair back into Jayne which caused quite the upheaval. Jayne bent over from the pain in his gut for all of two and a half seconds before quickly hitting him hard enough to knock him up and onto the table, and then he moved to fight the second man who had run up behind the first, “Ooo, goodie, seconds.”

Thayer nodded his head to his large henchman and looked at Mal. Even though Mal still had his gun trained on Thayer, when the henchman stood to his full height, Mal’s face twisted in the most comical ‘holy crap’ kind of way. About a full second of stunned silence passed before Mal said, “Alright, then.” and nodded his head matter-of-factly before deftly moving to shoot him in the chest.

The henchman stumbled backwards for a second and glared at his now bleeding chest and then back at Mal before approaching Mal again.

Mal’s frame went from rigid to a comic shake of his body as he said high pitched, “God! Don’t you die?”

Two more shots to his chest and he dropped to the floor in a dull thud.

When Thayer realized his men were so easily dispatched he stood quickly and moved to leave the room, but as he

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ANONYMOUS
Friday, 23 December 2005 20:19
*looks with begging eyes* More?
Friday, 23 December 2005 22:52
Got their dialog down pat. Great stuff, and can't wait for the next part. Hurry.
Friday, 23 December 2005 23:36
Really good,I want to read more.
Saturday, 24 December 2005 01:32
Gorramit. Knockin' out ain't good enough.

Have Jayne drag his ass back to Serenity. There needs to be a series of beatings.
Saturday, 24 December 2005 01:41
I totally understand ManicGiraffe...buuuut there's gonna be some serious shyt ensuing soon so I'm keepin lighter with the violence..FOR NOW..mwahhahaaha
Saturday, 24 December 2005 03:44
I don't usually like fics, but this one is right decent so far. The dialouge seems genuine and I always like them being pretty bad ass about saving the day.
Saturday, 24 December 2005 06:48
Great chapter. Loved Zoe beating Mal to the punch, pun intended. :)
Saturday, 24 December 2005 07:10
I told myself not to expect anything from this chapter. But I want more! Make this my christmas present!! PLEASE! I beg of you! I love it! The BDH to the rescue...but you had to end it! Bring on the shyt! (10!)
Saturday, 24 December 2005 20:59
- I was gonna do that.
- Sorry, sir. Couldn’t help myself.

self-restraint is seriously overrated

b
Sunday, 25 December 2005 10:15
Ooooh, BABY! That's some good writing. Fave line: “I like my entrances to make a statement.” Mal quipped with a humorous shrug of the shoulders. Excellent Mal-speak, Gypsylife.

This series is like cocaine to an addict. We want more. Have read the next part, of course, but came back here, realizing I skipped this. Didn't hurt continuity none for me though, because you are so good at keeping the theme flowing all through your fic.

Note: I HATE those gorram Inara-stealing-but-getting-Kaylee-by-accident brutes. I'm hoping they get what they deserve, and that it's on a par with Niska's tender mercies.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 16 January 2006 18:10
YAY! KAYLEE'S BACK!

That was awesome! and that last part...hehe! Gotta love it. Just GOTTA.

*runs to read more*

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