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Twelve days before Christmas : part 11

Thursday, December 22, 2005

On the eleventh day...

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On the eleventh day of Christmas my true love gave to me eleven pipers piping

Jayne stood watch while Kaylee worked on the conduit. He was standin’ concealed in the bushes while she was out in the open crouched by the fence. He didn’t like it. But it had to be done, they needed to get to the port and grab a ship. Once out of atmo and in the black they could send a wave to Serenity.

He knew the captain would be lookin’ for Kaylee, wouldn’t have given up yet. It was his job to get her to a spot where the captain could find her.

Before she started workin’ he’d done a bit of scoutin’ and been dismayed to find so many guards posted round the perimeter.

He was too big to be standin’ out in the open; although they was facin’ the other way, any of the guards alongside the fence perimeter might see him, open fire, alert security. Kaylee in contrast was hardly visible, layin flat on the ground to work, her brownish clothes givin’ her natural camouflage. But he worried ‘bout her, wanted to be with her, constantly.

Watchin’ her now he could see that she looked real tired, neither of them had slept much the previous night. Jayne was feeling too sick to sleep well and beside he couldn’t keep his eyes off Kaylee.

Kaylee would drift off then wake again shakin and upset. Dreamin’ again. He tried to keep her close, give her comfort. Kept checking she was there. He didn’t think he’d ever be able to let her out of his sight again. So he sat there and watched her sleep.

Now he was watchin’ her work and hopin’ that they’d be leavin’ this rock today.

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The captain had waved first thing this morning to tell them to be ready at a moments notice; he had a plan half-way worked out. So Wash was staving of boredom by walkin’ round the boat checking her readiness. He hoped that for once the plan would work, that Zoë and the others would be alright, and that Kaylee and Jayne would be rescued and they would all return to Serenity.

The boat was as ready as it could be, so he turned to h

Comments
Thursday, 22 December 2005 15:39
GAH! You're all... with the cliffhangers... and God, you can't do that!!! You can't leave it there. Put the next part up quick!!!

;P
Thursday, 22 December 2005 15:40
All the things good about Firefly - Great characterizations, excellent story. Thanks!
Thursday, 22 December 2005 15:49
GAH!

Don't leave it there!!!

And, well, I don't think I've ever loved Wash more than here, when he was telling Simon what's what.

As if you needed to throw in more tension. You've already got us hooked.
Thursday, 22 December 2005 15:51
Brilliant, bookaddict!!!

Looks like Simon will have a chance to help Jayne even though he knows Kaylee might have chosen Jayne over him.......

.......a chance for Simon to come out of this with a little dignity.....

....IF he allows Kaylee to be with the man she loves..........

I wonder if that will be the way this story ends...........

Thanks, bookaddict, for keeping us on tenterhooks until the very end!!! You have really written Kaylee, Jayne and Simon so well & the tension has been exquisite from the beginning right to the end (I hope!). Good job :) ;) :)
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 16:15
OMG! please have the other one posted early tomorrow or I won't be able to do any work (and then I'll be fired and it will be a sad holiday)!

love Wash laying it all out for Simon

*sob, wrings hands* Poor injured inconscious Jayne. Hope Mal, Book, and Kaylee all gave that hun dan what for!
Thursday, 22 December 2005 16:27
*grin*

I LOOOOOOOOOOOVE!!

Oh man, do I love it. Jayne growing weaker and weaker and still doing what needs doing. Doesn't ever even enter his mind to give up.

Wash and Simon were excellent. River and Zoe too. Them working together was a thing of beauty.

Only one chapter left? That's not enough!
Thursday, 22 December 2005 16:38
Oh YES!
This was the best chapter yet! Shiny shiny and shiny!

Everyone was just spot on! I loved Wash telling Simon just how it is, and oh man, River & Zoe! Good work!

I couldn't even wait for lunchtime, I had to read early! :D
Thursday, 22 December 2005 19:47
You Are Evil! Ahhh. Another cliffhanger!

Very good. Loving the Zoe River one two. Loving matter of fact Wash. Loving everything especially you!

Make tomorrow come faster!
Thursday, 22 December 2005 21:58
NNNOOO!!! Not another one! You.Are.Just.Evil! GAARRR! Great chapter though, especially loved Zoe and River.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 23 December 2005 20:59
Later your going to have to post all the chapters together.
Saturday, 24 December 2005 19:32
jayne!!!! remember what i said about the not daring? you better get simon to fix him up good next chapter...or else *menaces*

b

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