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Pretty Fits :part 2

Sunday, December 18, 2005

Coming up on the good stuff. Did a little editing and added a few scenes. Where is Kaylee?

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A/N: I forgot to disclaim in the my first post. Not mine, all hail Joss the creative genuis and Mutant Enemy.

Thanks goes to Cantonheroine for pointing out my booboo...I fixed it!

Chapter 2

“I best be goin’.” Kaylee said her voice quavering only slightly.

“Goin?” One of the men asked, “Why you got no where to be that’d be better than with us.” He was tall and lanky and had a very distinct and pungent smell to him. That smell got in Kaylee’s nostrils as he sidled up right next to her, way too next to her.

Kaylee moved from him and tried to walk away from the men but they blocked every route she tried. So instead she tried a bluff. “My husbands waitin’ for me.” She tried to indicate closeness by gesturing with her hand. “ I best be goin.”

However, the hand gesture may have done more harm than good, cause her whole arm looked like it was going to shake right off.

“Aw, now sweetie, we ain’t all bad.” The leader of the group started to walk towards her and she backed up into one of the other men.

And then everything went black.

**********

Mal shook Thayer’s hand and nodded his head. “Nice doin’ business with ya.”

Thayer reminded Mal of Simon in that ‘every hair on his pretty little head has it’s place, and dirt is my enemy’ kind of way. Mal thought that was about all that this ‘business man’ had in common with Simon.

“And you.” Thayer leaned his head over to his man who had just come up to whisper in his ear. After the man had apparently relayed news of some import, he nodded curtly at Mal. “Well, I’ve got dealings of my own to see to. I’ll send you a WAVE about that job we discussed.”

Mal shook his head and turned to leave. Zoe, never more than a foot from Mal’s side, followed close behind Mal. “You think that was on the up and up, Sir?”

Mal snickered and turned his head to Zoe, “Been a good long while since bein’ on the up and up mattered. Wouldn’t ya say? Jayne! Let’s go.”

Jayne had been overtly flirting with the scantily clad girl at the bar. “Aw, Mal. Just

Comments
Sunday, 18 December 2005 19:54
If Kaylee gets hurt I might cry! Great job! I was wondering what happened to part 2a, was relievd when I saw it back up. Love Simon/Wash interaction, and I'm serious about the crying. Post soon please!!
Sunday, 18 December 2005 21:11
Uh oh. Now Simon's got an inkling, and Mal and Jayne are about to jump in.

God help anyone who gets in their way.

You'd better post the next one ASAP.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 18 December 2005 22:05
What happened to Kaylee...? Let us read more!
Sunday, 18 December 2005 23:20
Haha, I'm rather fond of Badass Book. Please finish the next chapter quickly!!!
Monday, 19 December 2005 01:21
You can't leave us there! You really can't!

Poor Kaylee!

This is very good so far. Can't wait for more.
Monday, 19 December 2005 02:47
Yeah, the backside squeeze is much more like our Jayne - he loves touching things ;P Great job!
(I didn't mean you had to change it, by the way. I just know how picky I am when it comes to my writing, I hate when I miss something. I'm currently working on the THIRD re-write of my one and only fan-fic based on the feedback I got - still not sure if I'll post it yet).

So very typical of Kaylee to be more concerned with Inara's dress than her own health and safety.

More soon, I wanna see what happens.
MAI
Monday, 19 December 2005 03:50
What a great start, Gypsy! You have my attention. Can't wait to read more.
Tuesday, 20 December 2005 05:15
Gypsylife, you're a devil author. Got huge talent, understanding of cliffhanger tension and you're not afraid to use it! On, I say! More!
Tuesday, 20 December 2005 10:40
more please!!!

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ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 05:34
Uber fantabulous dear! I'm definitely intruiged. Can't wait to see what happens to Kaylee!

~MeiMei
Saturday, 24 December 2005 06:55
Not fair! Im a sensitive browncoat, and I could feel the tears welling up if Kaylee got hurt! She better not! Suspense...
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 16 January 2006 17:53
"Not me. Kaylee."

Do you have ANY idea what that one line did to me? We are talking chills-suddenly-going-up-and-down-everywhere, kick-in-the-gut LURCH feeling.

Yeah...that's not worded very well is it?

I LOVE IT!

*moves on to read Chapter 3)

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