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A Ribbon at a Time

Monday, December 5, 2005

Jayne meets the women of Serenity as they join the crew, and thinks about Kaylee.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 1923    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Title: A Ribbon at a Time

Author: Sullen Siren (adena(at)direcway(dot)com)

Summary: "He didn't know nothing about women. But she was a nice girl. Been a long time since anyone called him sweet who wasn't his mama."

Rating: PG

Disclaimer: I own nothing of worth. Please don’t sue. Firefly and all related characters are the property of Mutant Enemy, Joss Whedon, the Evil Fox Corporation, and so on. Definitely not mine. I'm just playing with their toys a bit.

Feedback: Loved and worshipped and greatly appreciated.

Note: Dedicated to tygress, who asked for Jayne to worship Kaylee from afar. This is close as I could get. Title is taken from the Dickinson poem "I'll tell you how the sun Rose."

A Ribbon at a Time

"She’s a rose

in a Lily’s cloak.

She can hide her charms;

it is her right.

There will be time

to chase the sun

with Ribbons undone."

- Tori Amos, "Ribbons Undone"

I. Introductions

He notices it when they first take him aboard the hunk of sky-junk they call a ship. Not that his last was any better, but they was good on their word. Had his own bunk and everything, and the company could be worse. Could be better too, since the only piece of tail he could get near were married and likely to rip his heart out if he so much as gave her a nice swat on the ass. Which were a shame. Zoe had the kind of ass Jayne could watch for hours.

He didn't watch so much now, 'course. His fingers still hadn't healed from last time she'd caught him. Had almost been worth it though.

So Zoe was off limits, and Jayne wasn't used to not having regular stops at whorehouses cross the 'verse. Man's got urges, after all. Which was probably why it irked him so much that he was obviously being kept away from the only other female-type ship-board.

They weren't even subtle about steering him away from that mechanic girl. She weren't his type at all. Jayne liked his women with meat and hips and breasts big enough to bury your face in. But she were fem

Comments
Monday, 05 December 2005 11:43
I really liked this, it was very well thought out.

The ribbon was such a nice touch. Bravo.
Monday, 05 December 2005 13:06
Loved the ribbon beginning and ending the story. Hope there's more to come?
Monday, 05 December 2005 15:15
Oh that was lovely! Your Jayne voice is phenominal. This part was my favorite: <i>He didn't mind so much. Girl could talk up a storm and Jayne liked the quiet sometimes. But he . . . well not worried. But pondered, sometimes. He didn't want Kaylee to look at him the way Inara did. Like he weren't nothin' at all. Like he was dangerous and unclean and stupid.</i>
Monday, 05 December 2005 17:41
Maybe if they all went away, she'd put the ribbons back in her hair. He missed the ribbons.
aaaw...*snuggles jayne*

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Tuesday, 06 December 2005 03:54
Awesome Jayne voice.
Hell, awesome work all round.

Well done. *applauds* ;P
Monday, 16 January 2006 13:38
I'm blown away...everything, the dialogue, the voices, the description...
I love Jayne's inner thoughts, you create so beautifully.
Thanks for brightening my day!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 03 May 2006 23:23
THis is my first Jayne POV and I have to say, Bravo. I really loved the bit,"Though maybe for different reasons, 'less 'Nara and her were having a whole lot more fun than he was thinkin' on, and if so he needed to think on it more."
It is so Jayne to get sidetracked by the thought of girl on girl action. I can even see the expression on his face as he pictures it. Sorta dumb, with a vacuous, dirty grin. HEE HEE

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