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The Innocents

Sunday, December 4, 2005

Mal, Inara, Kaylee and Simon embark on unexpected adventure on a small private terra-formed moon. This story is a work of erotica fanfiction (NC-17, adult language, situations and sexual content including male/female, BDSM, light male slash & explicit female slash: k/s, M/s, I/k, M/I, W/Z)

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 12038    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer: This story was written just for fun and is not an attempt to make money or infringe on any copyrights or trademarks belonging to Joss Whedon, Mutant Enemy, Fox or Universal. No disrespect is intended; imitation is the truest form of flattery. For any BDHs that might stumble across this, please know that this is a foray into fantasy with the characters we love without ever truly wanting to alter our beloved ‘verse. Anyone who might read this and consider associating the actual actors who play these characters on the screen with any of the events following should seriously consider therapy. Special thanks to Beerbad for inspiration.

This story is a work of erotica fanfiction (NC-17, adult language, situations and sexual content including male/female, BDSM, light male slash & explicit female slash: k/s, M/s, I/k, M/I, W/Z). You have been warned, so please read no further if you will be offended or are under the age of consent. For the rest of you, read on... (December 2005)

The Innocents

...By Kessa (YoSaffBrig)

Malcolm Reynolds’ voice came in strong over the cockpit intercom, “Wash, what’s the gorram hold up? I thought we were suppose to be in Sundale Estates more than an hour ago?”

“Yeah Captain, but our fuel cells’ are gettin’ real scarce. If I ride her low, we’ll get more out of her. We’re coming up on the Estates, though, so we should be good.” The pilot continued to speak into his handheld intercom, this time addressing the entire crew, “And we’re ready, people, to break atmo in five, four, three, two, one...Welcome to Sundale Estates, travelers. Local time is ten minutes past noon”

The Firefly class ship experienced a short shudder and darkness was replaced with blue sky and fluffy white clouds. Wash donned his piloting sunglasses and steered the ship toward the extremely small private moon’s only docking station. He casually took a bite out of the lunch his wife had actually been kindly enough to fix for him….mmmm,

Comments
Sunday, 04 December 2005 07:42
Whew! I don't know how many will be brave enough to leave feedback due to the subject matter, but I want to be sure to applaud you for your bravery in going where few FF fans will. Also want to say you gave very good warning at the top of the story.

That said, I liked some of the voices in the fic, you have a great way with Wash, in particular. And you set the scenes very well, not too much description nor too little. Good job with humor too. The gift basket scene was both funny and hunger-making. Keep flying.

Sunday, 04 December 2005 08:29
Warning! The following feedback might not be suitable for young children or those with a stick up their pigu when it comes to sex:

Holy....shit. Now this is some Grade A, prime quality erotic fan fic! A brave new world has been entered here, cuz this stuff is both disturbin' and arousin' at the same time ;)

Gotta agree with ItsaWash here....voices in this fic are great. Gotta wonder though if the later thoughts and statments made by the BDHs would be what Joss & co. would have them speechify with if they had gotten a chance to take the series to a level bordering this (cuz the only way this would have gotten on air intact is if Firefly had gotten moved to Cinemax or HBO for later seasons).

Honestly, I could have seen the lovely people at ME going towards a less...graphic version of this concept, possibly as a arc storyline for a hypothetical season 3 (story idea seems like something you would get about midway through a Joss Whedon creation if left to run long enough. Anybody have thoughts like this?

BlueEyedBriagdier
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 11:22
Wow....this could have been and to some extent is pretty disturbing. But you are a very good writer - I don't usually like the erotica stuff at all, and I read this and was even rather turned on by it. creepy!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 15:03
wow. kinky or what?!? *grins* good work!

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ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 15:09
WOW
Sunday, 04 December 2005 17:00
This was some powerful writin'! Awesome job telling the story without going over the edge into PWP! Poor Simon, though, not getting to experience the final ecstasy!

A couple of nitpics: in the 7th section "The seats were full of citizens still in there celebratory attire." That should be "their celbratory attire." And in the 9th section "Kaylee lied down on her belly..." That should be Kaylee "lay down..." or even "laid down..." Definitely not "lied down." You did such an awesome job everywhere else that those two instances just jarred.

Keep writing!

"I love my captain."
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 17:02
Oops, I can't even make corrections properly! I misspelled celebratory! Hangs her head in shame and walks slowly off-stage.

"I love my captain."
Sunday, 04 December 2005 17:25
Thanks to you all for your kind words. (Please keep them coming). I am glad those of you who have reviewed it have liked it. I aim to please... and misbehave. :-)

to Lvs2read: as you stated,
"celebratory" is correct. But I will edit the "lied down" to "lay down"...thanks.

-Kessa (YoSaffBrig)
Monday, 05 December 2005 01:37
WOOHOO IT'S A PERFECT 10!!!

~ ;)
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 05 December 2005 02:36
You should consider writing erotic novels. This was very good, much better than the few books of this sort that I've read. Can't help wishing it had been m/f instread of f/f and m/m, but I know the dynamics of the story wouldn't have worked that way.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 08 December 2005 22:55
This was Hot!! Its Gettin Hot in Herre!!Keep up the amazing writing pretty please!? :D
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 10 December 2005 06:55
wow... i'll be in my bunk
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 11 December 2005 18:13
Haven't spotted any Firefly fic containing BDSM before, but you certainly have made it in character and very believable. Congratulations!

ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 20 December 2005 13:34
Wow this fic was really great. I can picture everything the characters did as something they would actually do in a regular episode of Firefly. Great Work!!!
Saturday, 28 January 2006 07:47
Awww, why couldn't Simon not be a gentleman for one night...that was very well done...but I was looking forward to some poor fulfillment for Simon - and not at Mal's hands! :)
Monday, 30 January 2006 00:41
Thanks again for all the nice comments!

Please keep a lookout for the sequel coming very soon. It will be called Finding Solace and is all about Simon...and Mal (and the powerplay between them) - sorry Leiasky ;-) but I hope you will give it a read anyway.

I should have it up by the end of this coming week. In the meantime...

Aim to Misbehave!
~Kessa (YoSaffBrig)
Monday, 06 February 2006 04:39
The sequel, FINDING SOLACE is posted!!!

URL Link: http://fireflyfans.net/sunroomitem.asp?i=7690

Aim to Misbehave!
~Kessa (YoSaffbrig)

Monday, 03 April 2006 06:09
the f/f stuff is what I have been waiting for and it was worth it




I'll be in my bunk
LEXUSGREY
Sunday, 24 May 2009 23:43
This was great. I'm a huge fan of SM fics (I've got elements of it in pretty much all of the fics I've written) and I really enjoyed this :) Well written and as true to character as the situation would allow! Wonder what River is going to think when she reads their minds ;)

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