Disclaimer: This story was written just for fun and is not an attempt to make money or infringe on any copyrights or trademarks belonging to Joss Whedon, Mutant Enemy, Fox or Universal. No disrespect is intended; imitation is the truest form of flattery. For any BDHs that might stumble across this, please know that this is a foray into fantasy with the characters we love without ever truly wanting to alter our beloved ‘verse. Anyone who might read this and consider associating the actual actors who play these characters on the screen with any of the events following should seriously consider therapy. Special thanks to Beerbad for inspiration.
This story is a work of erotica fanfiction (NC-17, adult language, situations and sexual content including male/female, BDSM, light male slash & explicit female slash: k/s, M/s, I/k, M/I, W/Z). You have been warned, so please read no further if you will be offended or are under the age of consent. For the rest of you, read on... (December 2005)
The Innocents
...By Kessa (YoSaffBrig)
Malcolm Reynolds’ voice came in strong over the cockpit intercom, “Wash, what’s the gorram hold up? I thought we were suppose to be in Sundale Estates more than an hour ago?”
“Yeah Captain, but our fuel cells’ are gettin’ real scarce. If I ride her low, we’ll get more out of her. We’re coming up on the Estates, though, so we should be good.” The pilot continued to speak into his handheld intercom, this time addressing the entire crew, “And we’re ready, people, to break atmo in five, four, three, two, one...Welcome to Sundale Estates, travelers. Local time is ten minutes past noon”
The Firefly class ship experienced a short shudder and darkness was replaced with blue sky and fluffy white clouds. Wash donned his piloting sunglasses and steered the ship toward the extremely small private moon’s only docking station. He casually took a bite out of the lunch his wife had actually been kindly enough to fix for him….mmmm,
That said, I liked some of the voices in the fic, you have a great way with Wash, in particular. And you set the scenes very well, not too much description nor too little. Good job with humor too. The gift basket scene was both funny and hunger-making. Keep flying.
Holy....shit. Now this is some Grade A, prime quality erotic fan fic! A brave new world has been entered here, cuz this stuff is both disturbin' and arousin' at the same time ;)
Gotta agree with ItsaWash here....voices in this fic are great. Gotta wonder though if the later thoughts and statments made by the BDHs would be what Joss & co. would have them speechify with if they had gotten a chance to take the series to a level bordering this (cuz the only way this would have gotten on air intact is if Firefly had gotten moved to Cinemax or HBO for later seasons).
Honestly, I could have seen the lovely people at ME going towards a less...graphic version of this concept, possibly as a arc storyline for a hypothetical season 3 (story idea seems like something you would get about midway through a Joss Whedon creation if left to run long enough. Anybody have thoughts like this?
BlueEyedBriagdier
A couple of nitpics: in the 7th section "The seats were full of citizens still in there celebratory attire." That should be "their celbratory attire." And in the 9th section "Kaylee lied down on her belly..." That should be Kaylee "lay down..." or even "laid down..." Definitely not "lied down." You did such an awesome job everywhere else that those two instances just jarred.
Keep writing!
"I love my captain."
"I love my captain."
to Lvs2read: as you stated,
"celebratory" is correct. But I will edit the "lied down" to "lay down"...thanks.
-Kessa (YoSaffBrig)
Please keep a lookout for the sequel coming very soon. It will be called Finding Solace and is all about Simon...and Mal (and the powerplay between them) - sorry Leiasky ;-) but I hope you will give it a read anyway.
I should have it up by the end of this coming week. In the meantime...
Aim to Misbehave!
~Kessa (YoSaffBrig)
URL Link: http://fireflyfans.net/sunroomitem.asp?i=7690
Aim to Misbehave!
~Kessa (YoSaffbrig)
I'll be in my bunk
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