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Swinging (part 2)

Friday, December 2, 2005

River’s hiding, but Jayne keeps pointing at her. Mal’s at wit’s end, but Wash has plenty to go around. Collaborative with Cub; link to part one inside. First fanfic.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3027    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Inara always felt like she was smothering in the fencing uniform, and here she was entombed in it again, struggling to dissect her sparring partner’s defenses through the mask’s grids, her figure engulfed in the traditional head-to-toe protective garb, her arms and legs taut and heavy from endless parry, thrust, feint, thrust and parry.

The smell of sweat and talcum powder made Inara a little dizzy, but she was too busy battling her faceless opponent to ask why she was back in the academy, in the athletics hall, learning again the swift dance of blades. The sweat soaked her hair, making it stick to the sides of her face, and dripped down the back of her knees, but she was too focused to notice. She had to impress the fencing master with the precision of her technique, her feet in the right place always, her back in the proper angle, her blade flicking out rapidly like the tongue of a snake but a controlled movement as if the blade were part of her arm instead of this foreign metal she gripped with aching fingers. Her arms became snakes, and she danced, smiling a smile that was skin-deep.

Mallory Stanton sat on the edge of the bed, sighing, watching Inara’s eyes move frantically under their closed lids. He had given her more of the serum, pushing her to the edge of insanity to pump out more information in the hopes of salvaging this wreck of a job. Billy Evisse, the cro-magnon who planned this hunt for a fugitive woman-child, was shot dead by the Firefly captain’s enforcer. The men who stormed the Firefly, gracelessly he thought, did not report back, and the group who wanted the fugitives didn’t really care if the truth serum fried the brain of this woman, registered companion or not. Mallory freed a few locks of her hair from the stickiness of her flushed, sweaty face and pushed them back above her temple, noticing the tension in her jaw, her cheeks, her lips, wishing he could stop the pain that marred her features.

Mallory always had the cleanest fingernails of anyone he knew, and he noticed de

Comments
Friday, 02 December 2005 19:31
Is it just me, or do we seem to have a rash (pardon the pun) of fics that feature Jayne without his pants?

No, I'm not complaining. Pantsless Jayne is hilarious.
CUB
Friday, 02 December 2005 20:16
I really dig the way you did your scene introductions. Really pulls you into each scene:

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Inara always felt like she was smothering in the fencing uniform, and here she was entombed in it again...

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"Well, this day’s gettin’ stranger by the moment," Mal said.

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A bonnet. Braids. A dress many sizes too big. This is where I hide my River.

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If The Painted Lady Saloon was an actual lady, it would be the kind you don’t take home to mother.

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This is an interesting little story you came up with, too. Great job on your first fanfic.
Friday, 02 December 2005 21:57
agree with manicgiraffe: pantsless jayne = hi-larity of the best kind
love this line: Yes, Inara’s definitely safer
hee!!!

b
Friday, 02 December 2005 21:58
I'm really fascinated by Mallory! Poor masquerading for rich, the fingernails and the lack of conscience. Great character!!

And thast was some great River voice.

And then Wash at the end! We rarely ever see him by himself, so this is a treat! A hilarious one!

I loved the whole chapter, looking forward more!
Friday, 02 December 2005 22:36
This is getting more and more interesting as it goes along. Love the way you have worded the story and the little insights into the crew along with some shiny dialogue. Bravo, waiting eagerly for more! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 03 December 2005 01:51
Fascinating reading. I'm getting dragged into this story good and proper. Keep up the good work.
Saturday, 03 December 2005 03:01
Jayne "pointing", and River staring with Simon trying not to look. Nearly had soda coming out my nose.

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