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Perseus

Monday, October 31, 2005

Prequel to Patients. What exactly happened in the settlement of Perseus' Arm?

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2830    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Perseus’ Arm looked like just about every other Rim world settlement that Simon had seen so far in his travels with Serenity. It was a mining/farming settlement with about two thousand people living either in town or on one of the many outlying farms. Perseus’ Arm wasn’t the largest settlement on the planet of Calabus, that honor belonged to Cassiopeia, the capital city that lay over four hundred miles from Perseus’ Arm. Thankfully, Calabus was a Rim world, and the Alliance presence was minimal. According to Captain Reynolds’s the closest Alliance patrol was at least five days away. Because of that, Captain was allowing Simon and River to accompany Jayne into town for supplies while he and Zoë met some potential clients for a nice smuggling job.

Simon would have liked to be with Kaylee, Serenity’s genius mechanic, but said mechanic had work to do on the ship, and Serenity’s infirmary needed supplies. He couldn’t trust Jayne to get the supplies correctly since the big merc couldn’t even pronounce or spell penicillin, much less any of the other drugs Simon needed to keep the infirmary stocked.

Simon was speaking to the general store owner getting an idea of what medical supplies the store had and comparing it mentally to the list he had. Behind him Jayne was gathering the other supplies they needed for the ship, foodstuffs mostly. They had just come off a good smuggling job that had paid rather well, and Captain had given Jayne enough money to buy some fresh vegetables and food staples like sugar and coffee that the crew had been doing without for quite awhile. Jayne also had clear instructions to get a receipt that the Captain could compare to the change that Jayne would return with.

River was walking behind Jayne, playing some type of game that Simon was finding amusing. She kept stepping in Jayne’s shadow moving quickly whenever Jayne did trying to always step in the big man’s shadow. What was amusing to Simon was the fact that River’s game was annoying Jayne.

The owner of the general store we

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CUB
Monday, 31 October 2005 23:32
I thought this was much better than Patients, much more entertaining. You have a solid narrative style.

I did notice a few errors, though ("holding of" instead of "holding off," ending quotes with a period and then giving the attribution, that kind of thing). Might want to think about getting someone to beta.

Like I said, very entertaining overall.
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 04:20
Bravissimo.

I grant you the highest compliment I can pay to a fanfic author - "MORE, NOW!"
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 05:21
Baby, this is...everything it should be. As a companion piece to Patients, it gave me everything I needed, helped me better understand Jayne's status, mute patch-worked annorexic that he was in "Patients." I needed the back-story to make me see more clearly.

And I give you MAD props for daring (you did warn me you weren't afrade to go to uber-darkness) to go to the black, beyond and back, Reaver-style. Okay, so we knew they eat, rape and skin their victims, not necessarily in that order, but nobody but you had the nerve to spell it out this well. And certainly nobody ever had the eggs to loose the Reavers this graphically on our favorite Big Damn Hero. Jeez, baby! It hurt me to read it, but it needed to be.

Got more? Say you've got more. You really truly know we have to see our boy dig deep for the courage to get up and try it again. With the little moonbrain and her brilliant bro to help, he can do it. I know he can. But the question is, do you?
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 23:26
Make it so that the firefly comes back because kaylee got raped and they need the doctor and please dont make river love jayne its just not right but great fanfic!!!
Thursday, 03 November 2005 19:03
oh. my. god.

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Friday, 04 November 2005 03:54
Oh no.
Okay...now we know what happened! And very well done.
Now, if you could just, oh so kindly... FIX JAYNE!

You don't want me to send Niska's men after you do you? Don't think I won't!
:D
Friday, 27 January 2006 16:22
Very nice. Where is Serenity? Simon must be worried about Kaylee after the ship took off.....

Love to see another in this little series.
Tuesday, 16 May 2006 00:36
I've been patiently waiting for the continuation of your Patients story. Yes, I've been good, now please, please post a continuation. Please let us see how you intend Jayne, River and Simon to continue coping with the Reaver aftermath. Your stories are wrenching and wonderful with simple humanism. I am aching to see how you resolve the problems you've created.

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