TRAUMA MEDICINE: Chapter 23. Two by two.
Tuesday, September 20, 2005
Four years have past since Mal was forced to blow up Serenity and Simon disappeared with River and Book. A lot has changed since then. But a lot has stayed the same. The CONCLUSION to this series.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 4441 RATING: 9.0 (NC17) SERIES: FIREFLY
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TRAUMA MEDICINE: Chapter 23
Two by two.
RATING: R
WARNING: Slash
Many, many thanks to wedjateye for fabulous beta-ing, nit-picking and support.
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Author's note – For some reason this doesn't feel like the right place to post graphic slash. For that reason, I have abridged this chapter. But also I think the sex scene is actually fairly central to the characters' development. If you feel like reading the full story, it's here:
http://firefly.populli.org/archive/10/chapter23.shtml
Otherwise – just read on.
And if you missed the beginning it's here'>http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=2207'>here
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TRAUMA MEDICINE. Chapter 23. (Conclusion)
Two by two.
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Her head has slumped forwards onto the edge of the bed an' there's a trace of drool glistenin' at one corner of her mouth. Her normally neat an' combed hair's all over the place.
Inara don't look nothin' like a perfect Companion this mornin' but to Mal she's never looked more beautiful than she does in this moment, nor more real.
He hates to have to wake her.
“'Nara ...”
She doesn't stir. Not surprisin' seein' as she ain't been to bed – ain't hardly slept at all – for nigh on a week. Been keepin' watch at Tian Shi Di Li's bedside ever since the child fell sick.
Mal looks at the little girl's ashen face. Eyes as blue as her father's look back at him. Wo de tian , Mal loves this kid somethin' fierce. Makes his heart ache to see her suffer.
“Belly still sore, little one?”
She nods, her features tight with pain, too tired to cry any more.
Not for the first time in the past four years, Mal curses their lack of a medic.
The first time – that is, the first time he did so out loud – was about two months after Simon's departure.
They were on Hestia, workin' as casual labourers. Pay wa'n't bad. Enough to live on an' set a little aside. Which they all did. Even Jayne. An' if Mal had been surprised when the mercenar
I read the uncensored version and a darned impressive piece of writing it was--the whole story, not just the sex scene. Vivid, with feeling, believeablity, great interactions. Nothing I didn't like. The sex scene was frighteningly good as I still, as with this entire story, felt you kept the chararters in character; never felt like you had to take them to an out-of-character place to make the slash work. Remarkable.
The buildup and resolutions on the rest of the story were wonderful. Loved Zoe using Mal to scare her kids into obedience. And Jayne...his whole bit was great (and he ended up with Kaylee--sweet!). The discussion of Mal and Inara and how their relationship didn't/couldn't work was convincing. The 'perfection' of her approach. I don't know if you have it in you, but a story about Inara on that theme would be good.
Wonderful story overall and a terrific read. Thanks so much for sharing it!
I can't wait to see how you remix the movie!
Great job!
You can't take the sky from me
That was....amazing.
I read the full version. And I was so touched to see Mal finally able to acknowledge his love for Simon, and vice-versa. The way you tied up the Mal/Inara relationship was good (you really had me going!), though I do wonder what became of the Shepherd.
I really enjoyed the twist you put on the whole series, and the way you write the characters. Your Mal and Simon were made for each other. I loved it. Thanks for a great fic!
You even threw in a Jaylee, (a well done jaylee btw). I love it! This needs to be published and given all sorts of awards!
You rock!
Hazel
I loved the Jaylee bit, iI loved the bit where River was miming the words, and I read the full version (with some trepidation as I'm not really into Slash) and it was really, really well done.
Thanks again
Hazel
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