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Trauma Medicine: Chapter 17. A kind of poetry to it.

Sunday, April 3, 2005

Set against "Heart of Gold" - Mal unwittingly makes a new enemy and old ones start closing in. Inara's decision prompts Mal into making one of his own.

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Disclaimer: These characters, the plot and all the shiny came from Joss Whedon.

SPOILERS for “Heart of Gold.”

WARNING – this chapter is Rated NC-17 and contains masturbation and heterosexual intercourse as well as some half-hearted and short -lived bondage.

Thanks to my newly acquired and scrupulously nitpicking beta-editor Wedjat and to DarkEmerald for convincing me the sex scene was the remotest bit sexy!

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TRAUMA MEDICINE.

Chapter 17: A kind of poetry to it.

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The recording is a patchwork of inexpertly recorded second- or third-hand waves but its content is clear enough. With the sound turned way down low, Saffron plays it through again, checking she's got every last detail right.

The first voice is that of a Federal Agent. “Thank you very much, Mister Niska. You have been most helpful. We will feed your December coordinates into our databank and expand the search from there. Fortunately we have several waystations in the Georgia system that will have picked up their trajectory, even if the ID they're flying under is an assumed one.”

A sweet-faced little old man with wire-rimmed spectacles nods. “Is pleasure. Our agreement is solid, no?”

“Absolutely, Mister Niska. Our targets are the girl and her brother. The Alliance is more than happy for you to take, uh -,” There's a pause whilst he flips through some papers - “Malcolm Reynolds, once we have them in custody.”

“Is good.”

There's a crackle and the recording loses video. “They're heading for Saint Albans.”

“Good a place as any. Get that hundan Reynolds on screen. Wanna make sure that crate's still intact. I'm getting those gorram organs back if I have to kill everyone on board that junker Firefly in the process.”

Saffron tucks the piece of paper onto which she's transcribed the salient information inside her shirt and smiles to herself. Malcolm Reynolds may be too full of self-righteous crap to turn that pretty boy and his moon-brained sister i

Comments
Sunday, 03 April 2005 15:08
Oooh, very excellent. I particularly loved the way you handled Mal's night with Nandi especially as you set up the notion that Mal cannot handle a sexual relationship without getting violent ie hitting the women he beds so has more or less sworn off sex. His solution is touching as well as self affirming when his desire to pleasure Nandi as well gives him the moral strength to be untied and do just that without any of the feared violence ensuing. A safe place, and that suggestion that Nandi understands is nicely underplayed. I am hoping that Mal grumbling where the boy is at the end does not mean he will turn nasty on Simon as a reaction to all the hurt he now feels over Inara's decision to leave. So many broken pieces on this boat, sometimes I think only River is whole. Shiny, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 04 April 2005 07:27
Amazing.

From the start, given your story's premise, I considered this would be a problamatic chapter to work in. How wrong I was! This is easily one of the most elegantly interwoven of them all, and utterly true to your story's theme and premise.

So much good... River's comments interspersed with their varied meaning and others' interpretations; Simon--in every regard. Everything with him worked for me. Nandi and Mal--their bedroom scene just plain worked perfectly. I could *see* her expression at Mal's odd (appropriately odd) request.

Primo moment in interpretive writing here was, for me, Book, with the David and Bathsheba allusion. Excellent.
Monday, 04 April 2005 18:28
Ha! I was wondering how you'd fit Nandi into Mal's little problem. You did it perfectly, too.
Saturday, 09 April 2005 23:40
OMFG!!! Beautiful as usual! It was crazy, but I missed this chapter and the last! To sound like an utter romantic, I can't live without this! I smack myself for missing it! GAH!

Excellanté work! And the ending is leaving me hanging! *smacks you!* no cliffhangers! BAD!

Can't wait for the next chapter!
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 09 July 2005 05:29
Ok, so....why is there not more? There needs to be more, gorramit! This story's real shiny!

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