Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Bits of Time

Monday, February 14, 2005

Okay, I don't know how everyone will react to this one. It's my 1st fanfic that I dug up out of the abyss of word. It started out just being little snippits, but somehow morphed into a J/K story. They kinda just took over.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3255    RATING: 8.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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They stood facing each other in the dimmly lit engine room.

“I . . .uh ... .got you this.” Jayne shoved the package at Kaylee, not meeting her eyes.

Kaylee took the small box with a quizzical look. “I don’t understand . . .why?”

Because I want you to look at me the way you look at that prissy ass doctor! thought Jayne. However, the only thing that came out of his mouth was, “ ’Cause.”

Kayle opened the box and pulled out a small bottle that held about a cup of thick purple liquid. “What’s this?”

“It’s . . .uh . . .some stuff that you put in a bath to make it smell good . . .or something like that” Jayne was obviously getting nervous.

“Oh!” Kaylee beamed and unscrewed the cap. She inhaled at the bottle and grinned. “Lavender! How sweet!!! When did you get this?!”

“Last landing.” Jayne twisted his belt loop.

“It’s a shiny gift, Jayne!” Kaylee leapt to wrap her arms around his neck. She then backed away and looked at the vile again, “but . . .”

“But what?”

“Last time I checked Serenity ain’t got a bathtub.”

“Oh, . .um .. .well,” Jayne had begun to get that jittery look in his eye again. “Kinda thought maybe for the second part of the gift I could get you a room at the next stop with a tub.” He looked at Kaylee with a look that resembled a young boy asking his dad for money.

“Jayne!” said Kaylee, “Why are you givin’ me all these things?”

“You don’t understand what I’m sayin’ do you, lil’ Kaylee?” Jayne looked down trodden.

Kaylee raised an eyebrow.

Jayne scratched the back of his head. “ I want to .. .uh . .share the room with ya.”

“Oh.” Kaylee’s eyes widened. It was now her turn to look uncomfortable.

“oh.”

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River sat at the mess hall table thumbing through stacks of paper. One leg dangled listlessly while the other was bent with her foot resting on her chair. Her free arm wrapped around her bent leg and her chin rested on her knee. She hummed quietly in a minor key.

Simon had his back to her doing the night’

Comments
Monday, 14 February 2005 18:05
I remember reading bits and pieces of this somewhere. It's nice to read it all together.

A very moving story. =o)
Tuesday, 15 February 2005 00:24
I remember reading bits of this before too but feels like you added pieces. Somehow the ending doesn't feel like the end. Did that make sense to you?
Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 15 February 2005 01:09
I did post this somewhere else with a different ending, but I wasn't satisifed with it. I'm flattered and impressed that you remembered.
Tuesday, 22 February 2005 19:07
I really loved your story. Jayne/Kaylee are pretty cute :)
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 28 November 2005 20:03
I just read this again, loved it all over again, and realized I never left feedback the first time.

This story is hands-down THE best one on this site, for me. It has it all: married romance, a romantic triangle where K ends up with J (whee!), a cool new villain (I love your Grouper), bad-Jayne turned good, excellent Mal and River and everybody else's voices...Sigh. I'm in love with the whole gorram thing.

Fave line: "Mal chucked, "You know I don't sleep, Zoe." Hard to choose just one though. P.S. Do me a favor and go check out my first-ever Jaylee fanfic: The Measure of a Jayne. I made ref to the Hip. oath too (I think it's in Part 2 or 3.)

You got more of this tale? I'll check your profile to find out. Thanks for a read that felt like one of the best episodes of the show.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 16 March 2006 20:49
Shrde Shiny! Zui hao le. [the best]
--maghaffar

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