Disclaimer – Everything either does belong to Joss or it should. I’m just borrowing his shiny ‘verse for a while.
The 21st Lancers belong to the British Army so I’m borrowing them too. I hope they don’t mind.
Thanks to my readers and special thanks to my proofreader Landry
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INS Charybdis – Action Stations – 2520AD
Van der Heijden struggled with his pressure suit. He had never liked wearing them but only an idiot fights a space battle not wearing one. The ship might be armoured and airtight but having to leave the bridge just because a lucky hit depressurised part of the ship was just stupid. You didn’t need to wear the helmet, it could sit ready secured on a tether next to you on the deck, or hooked to your belt, but if the ship suddenly suffered explosive decompression you’d never be able to put on your whole EVA suit before your blood boiled out of your nose.
All the controls were deliberately oversized to allow for clumsy hands but most of the bridge crew were working without gloves to get a better feel of their stations, their gloves stuffed securely into their helmets. If the alarms went off you just breathed out expelling the air in your lungs and quickly put on the remainder of the gear, as long as you didn’t panic there was time to don gloves and helmet before the tiny blood vessels in your body started to pop, well that was the theory at least.
The bridge was actually more like a small amphitheatre than the command deck of most vessels. Like her sister ship Scylla , the Charybdis was a command and control vessel not just a warship so the various bridge stations, navigation, gunnery, communications etc. were arrayed in a semi-circle around what was apparently a large empty space, unless the holographic gear was running.
The Admiral began pacing around as was his habit. He had always found it easier to think if he was mobile. ‘Give me the cube,’ he ordered in his best command tone and then he began stomping around the command deck in the oversiz
Oh, I also admire the way that you wrote the Alliance Captain Huaquing, and the honorable way he died. Not many would portray an Alliance Officer like that. Kudos to you.
So...where's the next story?!?!? I need more!!!
- Soul
You can't take the sky from me
Nooooo.... Damn it all, now what? Twenty three parts and we still wants more, that speaks of a very satisfied audience, Jon... Your writing has definitely improved throughout the telling of your tales.
Hope the time to contemplate the next step isn't as longer than it needs to be... Don't keep us waiting too long...
Loved it,
Keep flyin'
Dru (still need to register)
High mark for me: Hauquing invoking the ragnarok then ending up getting smacked by Thor’s Hammer. Beautiful symmetry. You betcha!
Hauquing was excellent in every regard. I also enjoyed the Wash/Mal interactions—nice to see them in such a combat situation where Wash is a military pilot and Mal is acknowledging that, with both still completely in character. The ‘no quarter’ scene with Book, Inara, Cally, etc., was extremely well-played in the morality vs reality situation.
The battle sequence was not only well done technically and descriptively, but written and paced to be tense, taut, and exciting at the same time. Outstanding blend. The action was clear and vivid.
Mal, at the end, wanting to smash the monument on Hera… the simple, understated way you handled that was far more effective, IMO, than if you’d expounded on his feelings or such. Powerfully done.
That was just a darned good time all the way around. Thanks so much for sharing your story!
Words can not even begint ot describe how good this last part was (like the whole series). Second all the comments above.
Looking forward to reading the next points.
Seriously, I have been spreading the news of this fic's existence far and wide. And this last, truly amazing.
And I'm just bad enough to give you props for the Wheel of Time reference. :) (And to see it as such. That /is/ where it's from, right?)
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