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Here Be Dragons (Part XXIII)

Monday, February 7, 2005

Conclusion of the 'Here Be Dragons' series.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 6299    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer – Everything either does belong to Joss or it should. I’m just borrowing his shiny ‘verse for a while.

The 21st Lancers belong to the British Army so I’m borrowing them too. I hope they don’t mind.

Thanks to my readers and special thanks to my proofreader Landry

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INS Charybdis – Action Stations – 2520AD

Van der Heijden struggled with his pressure suit. He had never liked wearing them but only an idiot fights a space battle not wearing one. The ship might be armoured and airtight but having to leave the bridge just because a lucky hit depressurised part of the ship was just stupid. You didn’t need to wear the helmet, it could sit ready secured on a tether next to you on the deck, or hooked to your belt, but if the ship suddenly suffered explosive decompression you’d never be able to put on your whole EVA suit before your blood boiled out of your nose.

All the controls were deliberately oversized to allow for clumsy hands but most of the bridge crew were working without gloves to get a better feel of their stations, their gloves stuffed securely into their helmets. If the alarms went off you just breathed out expelling the air in your lungs and quickly put on the remainder of the gear, as long as you didn’t panic there was time to don gloves and helmet before the tiny blood vessels in your body started to pop, well that was the theory at least.

The bridge was actually more like a small amphitheatre than the command deck of most vessels. Like her sister ship Scylla , the Charybdis was a command and control vessel not just a warship so the various bridge stations, navigation, gunnery, communications etc. were arrayed in a semi-circle around what was apparently a large empty space, unless the holographic gear was running.

The Admiral began pacing around as was his habit. He had always found it easier to think if he was mobile. ‘Give me the cube,’ he ordered in his best command tone and then he began stomping around the command deck in the oversiz

Comments
Monday, 07 February 2005 19:39
Good gorram, Hotpoint, that was F*cking awesome! I know you've got another series planned for the 2nd war for Independence, but what a way to close out this one! I simply can't wait to see where you take things from here now that River has some really big firepower to play with.

Oh, I also admire the way that you wrote the Alliance Captain Huaquing, and the honorable way he died. Not many would portray an Alliance Officer like that. Kudos to you.

So...where's the next story?!?!? I need more!!!

- Soul
Monday, 07 February 2005 20:21
Gripping, as always. Utterly rewarding. I know it takes you a long time to write so much, Hotpoint, but it reads so effortlessly. Thank you!
Monday, 07 February 2005 20:45
That was definitely worth waiting for. =o)
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 07 February 2005 21:31
An amazing conclusion to an excellent storyline. I look forward to your next series!
Monday, 07 February 2005 23:24
Excellent! Brilliant battle sequences and I just love the Shadow AI more and more each time he gets in on the action. Superb sense of humour and so very shiny to have Mal et al on the winning side for once. And I echo Mal's wish to blow the rutting Alliance monument to gorram *diyu* when they retake Hera. Good myth, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 08 February 2005 00:29
As ever, Hotpoint, gripping and very entertaining. I suspect you have something in store for River that none of us can imagine. Thank you for another great series. Waiting patiently for the Second War of Independence...
Tuesday, 08 February 2005 06:48
The conclusion!?!?

Nooooo.... Damn it all, now what? Twenty three parts and we still wants more, that speaks of a very satisfied audience, Jon... Your writing has definitely improved throughout the telling of your tales.

Hope the time to contemplate the next step isn't as longer than it needs to be... Don't keep us waiting too long...

Loved it,

Keep flyin'
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 08 February 2005 16:40
That was damn, damn good!!! I really hope you do a second part, or even somewhing new with your characters; I loved this!


Dru (still need to register)
Tuesday, 08 February 2005 17:11
Ef'in awesome as usual, you've raised the bar so much that it's almost spoiled me for other fics! Keep up the great work and as expected, I await the next installment with bated breath.
Tuesday, 08 February 2005 17:41
Tzao gao, Hotpoint…! That was an astonishing read. I stand in complete awe.

High mark for me: Hauquing invoking the ragnarok then ending up getting smacked by Thor’s Hammer. Beautiful symmetry. You betcha!

Hauquing was excellent in every regard. I also enjoyed the Wash/Mal interactions—nice to see them in such a combat situation where Wash is a military pilot and Mal is acknowledging that, with both still completely in character. The ‘no quarter’ scene with Book, Inara, Cally, etc., was extremely well-played in the morality vs reality situation.

The battle sequence was not only well done technically and descriptively, but written and paced to be tense, taut, and exciting at the same time. Outstanding blend. The action was clear and vivid.

Mal, at the end, wanting to smash the monument on Hera… the simple, understated way you handled that was far more effective, IMO, than if you’d expounded on his feelings or such. Powerfully done.

That was just a darned good time all the way around. Thanks so much for sharing your story!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 25 February 2005 03:59
man i can not begin to discribe how awsome that was! i love how you made the ally captain in to an honorable man and turned the blue hand guys into cowards. I am dieing o read the independants return to power and mals role in it.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 11 May 2006 21:59
WishuponaWash speaking

Words can not even begint ot describe how good this last part was (like the whole series). Second all the comments above.

Looking forward to reading the next points.
BLEIDDYN
Wednesday, 13 June 2007 23:49
Holy frickin gods, HP!

Seriously, I have been spreading the news of this fic's existence far and wide. And this last, truly amazing.

And I'm just bad enough to give you props for the Wheel of Time reference. :) (And to see it as such. That /is/ where it's from, right?)

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