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The Pillow Book of Inara Serra, Part I: Book of Words

Monday, December 13, 2004

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4139    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The usual disclaimers. This is a work of fanfic, not intended to entrench on any parties registered copyright interests.

With appologies to Joss Whedon, Sei Shonagon, and Peter Greenaway whose brilliance inspired this work. Thanks to Mai and Inaraesque for being the best betas in the verse.

86. He lay back obediently

He lay back obediently, silent for once, as my brush danced across his skin. It didn’t start out that way. He grumbled during the bath of water and lemon juice.

“I did bathe this mornin’ you know. You tryin’ to say I stink.”

“Mal this is part of the ritual, just lie back and enjoy it.”

“You know, I can’t afford any of your fancy wiles.”

I gave him my exasperated smile as I dried him off and gently pushed him onto the bed. I have learned to pick my fights. He does not mean to hurt me with his barbs, it’s just his way. I kissed him gently lulling him into complacency, and then I let my brush speak for me.

*I love you,* a simple phrase in French for his right arm.

*You are my home,* a concept in Russian for his left arm.

“That tickles.”

“Shhh . . . hold still. Let me have my way.“

*Your words cut me like razors,* arched around his collarbone with the Japanese symbols reaching up to caress his jugular.

*You heal me. You hurt me. Only you have this power. You and no other. I am yours, eternally. You are mine forever.* I scrawled this polyglot prayer across his chest. He moaned in pleasure as the oils I mixed with the ink warmed his skin. The unguents made his muscles quiver involuntarily.

“What are you doing to me?”

I filled my eyes with meaning and mischief, “Don’t you know. I’m casting a spell on you. Companions are trained in all the arts.”

“Well, whatever it is don’t stop.”

*In you, I have found the meaning of Serenity,* this down his right leg, the Sanskrit enlarged so that the words barely brush his inner thigh.

*And once you’ve been in Serenity you can never leave,* in Hebrew on his left.

“’Nara . . . I . . .” the wo

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 13 December 2004 05:52
OK, YOU HAVE to continue this.

Damn it, I want more. You just was teasin' and that ain't nice. I love the voice and tone you began the sotry with.

Bravo, great job!

Cassie E
Monday, 13 December 2004 17:15
Needless to say my favourite part was the first part, that was all kinds of humorous and flirtatious between Inara and Mal with a hint of the deep swirl of passions never spoken. After that it gets cloudy and sad like a storm brewing deep and troubled on an uncharted horizon. Too much in the middle is missing and what is gone has the echo of pain and tears not joy. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 14 December 2004 00:13
Okay...that...was...good!

I can't wait to hear more of this.
EVILANA
Tuesday, 14 December 2004 05:28
I loved it. I really did. I can't wait for more. You really had me, I mean it. It was more than good, It was GREAT!!
Wednesday, 15 December 2004 15:36
I have to say, this is excellent. The first part is amazing. The second part is a little rockier, but only because it jumps forward such a great distance in time. The final section was a little too preachy for my tastes, and it was kind of confusing, in that we've had this previous section which seemed to indicate Inara was dead. Hard to place this in time.

Overall, though, you have a lush style and a firm grasp of description. Some writers go too far one way or the other, but you've struck just the right balance. I look forward to reading more of your work!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 15 December 2004 16:04
you've read too much jacqueline carey, but that's not a bad thing. nice voice, interesting theme, keep writing
NUR
Thursday, 16 December 2004 02:06
Perfectly lovely. I wish we knew a little more about what happened between the first two parts though. I'd love to know why Inarra went back to being just a whore in Mal's eyes.
Friday, 17 December 2004 01:30
A very excellent beginning! I love the human pillowbook section, really remarkable! The second section is very good, too, although I agree with others that it needs some polish to stabilize it, but the feeling comes through quite clearly and it leaves me longing to know what transpired to get us from a to b. The last bit was somewhat confusing...didn't know if it was a commentary until I got to the end and realized it was another piece of the story.

Keep writing. I love this.
Sunday, 16 January 2005 19:34
You have a lovely, sure hand with images, and this one is my personal favorite:
She the one who translated it for me. Wrote it all down to in that thin wispy hand of hers (so light it looked like the words would float away if you let them).
Saturday, 05 March 2005 10:26
Phaedra - that was *stunning*. Loved, loved, loved it. Glad I stole a bit of time from my ludicrous schedule to read it. That will stay with me.

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