Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

I Like Drawing Cephalopods

Wednesday, May 12, 2010

Post-BDM; Reg Crew; OCs; Inara/Mal, Simon/Kaylee,: Set in the 'Verse that is Four. River's thoughts during Hannah's first days on ship.

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Because it's not finals unless I'm procrastinating with fanfic...

Set smack dab between parts 2 & 3 of the fic

As well as generally follows and progresses on the events of-

Xiăo Guĭ

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People.

People, word originated from the Anglo-norman French word Poeple, from the latin populus. Scientific, Homo Sapien, modern man, thinking man, literally ‘Wise Man.”

Not a man, not a wise man. Not of the correct gender. Girl, two girls. Female. Little one big one. Babe and adolescent. Age. Solar cycles. Development and growth. We grow like flowers. We need sun and water or else we wither.

One too young, needs mother’s milk, needed, mother no longer there, present, alive. Cardiac functions of birth mother ceased due to emaciation and infection, brainwaves ceased shortly after. Was always going to die, bad luck in life. Bought her, bought her young, young and pure. Have a bit of fun, make her moan, make her writhe, wear her out, leave her a gift. Sullied the new toy, planted the seed, time for a new one, sell her off. Get another, another to sully, white to red. Disregard the new belly, just like the others. Mother, young mother and baby, baby is everything. Baby is everything, baby is safe now, so she closed her eyes and said goodbye. Left the husk behind, left baby behind.

Baby looks like a wrinkled hose monster.

Hoses are important though, hoses bring the breath and a liquids. Life liquids.

The second, the adolescent.

Like her, like the River.

Dodge Simon, Simon’s twisted, Simon’s broody. He fluffs his feathers and squabbles. Simon’s a fat hen. Except not fat, just squabbly. Won’t let her see the new River girl, won’t let her study th

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Wednesday, 12 May 2010 10:10
First off, apologies to my beta for not shipping this one over. It's finals, therefore it's one of those horrid implus posts (I will however be shipping you the rest in the near future).

Hopefully the progression of lucidity comes off as an intentional stylistic choice.

And while I don't condone the use of mind altering drugs to write a character, if your on meds that suggest not operating heavy machinery the chances of you channeling River Tam successfully apparently go up ten fold.
Wednesday, 12 May 2010 19:27
I am at a standing computer, on a break, in professional-looking clothing. I embarrassed myself in front of thirty-odd people by yelping like a kindergartner when I got to "I like drawing happy cephalopods"...

And I'm going to thank you for it. Much funny.

I love the refrain of "Simon is a fusspot/Simon is a boob"--they are nicely timed.

Very interesting take on River--the pictures come across as very visual, the concepts being linked by associative flow, trimmed of all the explanation our speech usually has. And yet it makes sense since you pared it down to simple.

Re: your comment about drugs. Ah, welcome to the club. :D I don't allow myself to write River-speak unless it's after 1 in the morning...going on 40 doc pages of Albatross now. Are you planning on more? Would like to see it.
Thursday, 13 May 2010 03:11
I like this too! Good River speak. But I see troublesome fruity oaty bar octopi lurking in blouses and inside pencil leads. Maybe she makes them eat men in suits.
WOONSOCKET
Saturday, 22 May 2010 20:51
Very good River speak.
Very fun chapter.
Wish my pain killers were as much fun as yours obviously are...

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