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Dagger of the Mind, chapter 1

Thursday, March 18, 2010

A vengeful enemy from the war targets Mal and Zoe, and it's up to Wash to save the day. But first, Zoe sizes up the men, Wash contemplates the women, Mal looks forward to a shiny new job, and then the trouble starts....

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2328    RATING: 10.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer: This is a work of fiction based on characters from the Firefly 'verse created by Joss Whedon. No copyright infringement is intended.

Spoilers: None. This story is set pre-series, about six months after Kaylee joins the crew.

Pairings: Wash/Kaylee, Wash/Zoe

AUTHOR'S NOTES: The story was inspired (ironically) by a deleted scene from the series pilot episode 'Serenity,' plus a little Shakespeare. The deleted scene deals with the end of the Battle of Serenity Valley and is transcribed as the prologue to Dagger of the Mind. Time frame is two years after the Battle of Serenity Valley. About eight months after Wash joins the crew and six months after Kaylee joins the crew. For everything that follows, consider it AU, if you prefer. Scroll-over titles added for those who want to see Chinese translations and notes to Shakespeare references!

References: HGH = Human Growth Hormone; Macbeth Act 1 Scene 7

Is this a dagger which I see before me, the handle towards my hand? Come, let me clutch thee. I have thee not, and yet I see thee still. Art thou not, fatal vision, sensible to feeling as to sight? or art thou but a dagger of the mind, a false creation, proceeding from the heat-oppressed brain?

– Macbeth , Act 2 Scene 1

Prologue

FIREFLY PILOT, DELETED SCENE #2 TRANSCRIPT:

Zoe describes the end of the Battle of Serenity Valley to Simon

SIMON: (turns on talking encyclopedia) Serenity. Read.

ENCYCLOPEDIA: In the war to unite the planets, the Battle Of Serenity was among the most devastating and decisive. Located on Hera, the valley was considered a key position by both sides, and was bitterl

Comments
Saturday, 20 March 2010 00:12
I notice that you were drawn to my Zoe chapter, and that it's your portrayal of Mal that I most enjoyed (I am a hopeless Mal/Inara shipper, after all). 'He also had that whole dark, brooding cloud of disgruntlement thing that women mistook for hidden depths,' - yep, that's about it! :)

Having said that, excellent Wash but particularly Zoe. Hard to get inside Zoe's head when her face gives so little away, but you've done a great job of portraying her mind and spirit.
ELLAGREGGS
Saturday, 20 March 2010 01:40
Thank you. Writing Zoe is definitely a challenge.

And with your story, well, I own two dogs and am a pretty hopeless dog-lover, so when I saw the title, how could I not read it.
2X2
Saturday, 20 March 2010 11:54
You have a style that flows really well, effortless to read! Very nice!
Saturday, 20 March 2010 12:50
Very nice beginning - it all went from casual to ohhhhh crap so quickly, very true to firefly tone. And I am really enjoying your word choices! Good, solid characterizations too - I'm glad I have more to read :)

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