Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

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Wednesday, February 10, 2010

River discovers a secret military hospital on a backwater planet where Blue Sun is trying to weaponize the pax. SPOILER ALERT - This is the shooting script for our fan film.

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EXT. PIONEER VILLAGE - DAY

JAYNE, KAYLEE, and RIVER are walking through the snow towards a small store. Serenity is flying away overhead. There are a few people around, but it's pretty quiet.

JAYNE

How does it get so hot that Mal has to ditch me on this backwater planet, anyway?

KAYLEE

Oh, it's only for two days.

RIVER

Forty nine hours and thirteen minutes. Give or take an hour.

JAYNE

Just didn't figure on spendin' two days with the two of you doin' next to nothin'.

KAYLEE

(Punches Jayne in the arm playfully)

Oh, come on, Jayne. I thought you figured we were kinda pretty.

JAYNE

(Almost blushing)

Well, can't really argue with that.

They arrive at the store, where KAYLEE steps inside and starts talking to the owner. RIVER is looking around curiously, apparently trying to figure something out.

JAYNE (CONT'D)

What? What's the problem?

RIVER

I - I'm not sure.

JAYNE

Not sure? What? Did you hear somethin'?

RIVER

Heard. Yes. Heard their screams. Heard their...

JAYNE

Ain't nobody screamin'.

RIVER

Not that you can hear, no.

RIVER walks away, not watching where her feet are landing. She walks to another building and puts her ear up to the wall.

JAYNE

What you playin' at, girl?

RIVER

(unsure)

Reavers?

JAYNE

Reavers?! There ain't no ruttin' Reavers inside that building.

KAYLEE runs up behind them.

KAYLEE

There you two are. Left me all by my lonesome over -

RIVER

(whispering)

Shh.

KAYLEE

(also whispering)

What's in there?

JAYNE

(normal volume)

Thinks there's Reavers in there.

RIVER

Not reavers... Not yet.

JAYNE

I thought you were over this bein' crazy thing.

KAYLEE

You be nice!

JAYNE

What?

River pulls a panel open to reveal a keypad. She types in the combination and opens the door.

INT. HOSPITAL - CONTINUOUS

They enter what appears to be a hospital. There are Blue Sun signs on the walls. This hospital is nothing like the village outside.

JAYNE

What in the ruttin' -

KAYLEE

Guys, I don't think we should

Comments
Wednesday, 10 February 2010 04:33
Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. I want our fan film to be awesome, and we're shooting next week.

Sorry, all the formatting went away as soon as I pasted the script, but you get the idea.
Wednesday, 10 February 2010 04:40
Next week? but... You're in Salt Lake City, aren't you? How are you going to make the outdoors scenes look hot in February? It's still muddy out. And you can't spray a person down in February so you can make them look sweaty, they'll be freezing.

Maybe you're shooting the indoors parts. That could work.

Well, pretty good. It feels like it moved pretty fast, but then this is a fic about Jayne and River. And there's a lot of action.

Question: Blue Sun doctors hidden away in secret government labs on sparsely inhabited Rim Worlds can recognize River on sight?
Wednesday, 10 February 2010 06:30
Apparently I need to explain the "get so hot" comment better. Heat as in pressure from the feds. I'll fix that before we film.

Yes, the doctor recognizing her is a bit convenient, but honestly, a doctor working on the pax would know the history around it.

Thanks for the feedback.
TWO
Wednesday, 10 February 2010 18:21
Good scenes from your script. It is exciting. I like it and I'm hard to please. But (and there's always a butt-head or a naysayer in every situation) there are a lot of stunts, one right after the other. Those are tough to do... convincingly... unless your stuntmen have been practicing. Fighting is hard to fake and still look real.

Best of Luck with that shoot next week.
Thursday, 11 February 2010 17:55
Ah, that makes sense about heat.

It's a Blue Sun doctor, but is River involved with Pax research? Pax makes Reavers. River is a psychic with a cut up amygdala. I think they're different programs.

But maybe this doctor was an underling of Mathias, and he transferred here after the Academy.
Thursday, 11 February 2010 23:33
River was one of the people responsible for a huge Public Relations fiasco around the pax. It makes sense that he would know who she is.
Monday, 22 February 2010 15:00
Sadly, this didn't get filmed. I lost my actress for River, so my actress for Kaylee became River, and we blitzed together a coat for my brother to play Mal. All we had was an outline when we started filming. It's much shorter than this, and less dialog. But it'll still be pretty good stuff once we get it all put together.

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