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The Price Paid--Chapter Four--Something Frivolous

Wednesday, July 16, 2003

This is the next chapter in the story of what happened between the laying down of arms and the picking up of passengers. Mal and Zoe come to some decisions about their future. Oh and there is a slinky dress.

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THE PRICE PAID--CHAPTER FOUR –SOMETHING FRIVOLOUS

This is the next chapter in the story of what happened between the laying down of arms and the picking up of passengers. Please feel free to let me know your criticisms. I really am interested even if you didn’t like the story, hell, especially if you didn’t like the story. Once again I would like to thank Archer for his tireless beta. At his suggestion I am putting the glossary at the top to make translation easier.

All of the customary disclaimers apply, please do not archive without permission.

Chinese Glossary

pofù [bitch]

bao bei [darling]

PRESENT DAY

They didn’t make it on the next boat but the one after that they got the berth. He must have done his best for the woman, because the berth was a good one. The ship was a converted troop carrier, now used to carry terraforming crews to the outer rings but had to refit at the Eavesdown Docks on Persephone. They got a miniscule cabin to themselves for the two week trip, giving them time to map out a plan. She had known he was hatching something since before they made it to Relocation and she figured he’d tell her when he was ready. He was ready the second day out.

He came in to their berth to find her reading on the bunk. She could tell he was nervous as he wandered around the tiny cabin picking up and putting down the oddiments that collect when people live in too small a space, her hair combs, the chess pieces left on the board, his razor. Seeming to make up his mind to take the plunge, he turned to face her and took a deep breath.

“Zoe, I’ve been studyin’ on what to do when we get to Persephone.”

She put down the book and gave him her full attention. “You ain’t serious about buying a spread.” She made it a statement not a question.

“I made up my mind, ain’t never gonna call a place home that someone can take away from us again.” He looked at her with an unreadable expression in his eyes, only the restless movem

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ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 16 July 2003 03:40
That's Zoe, ever the practical one :P
Wednesday, 16 July 2003 04:43
“Well, I guess I can always be buried in it.”

ouch, sent shivers. I hate when my favorite characters say things like that to tempt fate. Very nice.

I like your angle on why Mal can't go back to Shadow.

Shiny Story
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 16 July 2003 04:46
I'm very glad to see the next chapter up! I'm really into this story and hope it will last a good long while, even after they get their revenge on Avery. I'd like to know about their first time out in the black alone with only the new mechanic and pilot. :)
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 16 July 2003 06:17
I'm still in love with this story. Although this chapter isn't that "shippy". I think Mal/Zoe should become an official ship and this story keeps strengthening that thought for me.

nkosazana
Jenn
Wednesday, 16 July 2003 08:03
Oh, I wager long after bad old Avery is dead and buried, Defender will be cranking it out. She's like, unstoppable, y'know.

Assuming Avery meets his ghastly and well-deserved demise, that is. I'm still in suspense myself.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 17 July 2003 17:11
I'm really enjoying this story - how long is it going to be?

You've done really well at capturing the voices and the rhythm of the show.
Friday, 18 July 2003 21:30
Thanks for all your kind words. I just got the beta back on the next chapter and have written two more beyond that waiting to be beta'd. I'm sorry that it is taking so long to conclude but I keep getting sidetracked into their history. I am trying to post as regualarly and frequently as possible but sometimes real life interferes. I hope I haven't lost anyone by choosing to post in chapters. Feel free to be as critical as you like, who knows maybe I'll even get better if I hear from you.;)

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