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Longing

Thursday, July 10, 2003

Just a little light-hearted Mal/Kaylee interaction to keep me happy. Plus there's a horsie.

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I’m just playing with these folks; promise I’ll give ‘em back once I’ve had my fun. No sueing.

Just one more… this is in response to a fluffy little challenge over at livejournal. It’s just improv and I wrote it in the space of an hour or two, so forgive me if it sucks. I get high on reviews, so please be generous with them even if they ain’t nice.

Longing

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“I want a pony.”

Mal looked sideways at her. Behind them, Jayne snorted out a laugh.

“Ok,” Mal told her as they walked the worn dirt road, the sun on their left. “Why?”

Kaylee adjusted the position her left arm had in his, staring longingly at the wide pasture on their right, and at the small group of horses just beyond the three-railed fence. “’Cause. Don’t tell me you never had a pony when you was growin’ up, cap’n.”

“Had a herd. But they served a purpose, did work.” Earlier this morning, when he’d brought her along with him and Jayne to buy spare rations, he’d thought it was a good idea. A leisurely walk would be nice, as they were in no hurry, and she’d be able to get out of the ship for the short time Serenity would be docked. Maybe if they had enough platinum left over, he could let her pick out the biggest bunch of strawberries in the entire shop.

But the way their conversation was going, she’d be bringing back a new pet instead of fruit.

He wasn’t looking at her, but from the sound of her voice she sounded like she was in the middle of a mild pout. “So did Ram,” she told him. “Took me and my brothers to school, daddy sometimes used him to haul around parts that were too heavy for him, but that weren’t too often… an’ when there wasn’t work we’d take him into town and charge folk to let their kids ride him.”

As amazing as this new bit of information was, Jayne apparently had stopped listening after her first sentence. “You named your horse Ram?”

Mal hid a grin as his mechanic turned to shoot a defiant look at Jayne, her arm still looped with his. “Yeah, ‘cause Jay

Comments
Thursday, 10 July 2003 06:40
Ok, let me put this to you in captain dummy-talk.

THIS ONE DOES NOT SUCK! THIS ONE DOES NOT STINK! THIS ONE IS AWESOME! THIS ONE IS Da BOMB!

Dong ma?

This is my fave one, and I'm so PROUD of you. You are doing great! Just don't try to overwrite it, or constantly redo it, this one came out perfect...which is why I like it so much.
LJC
Thursday, 10 July 2003 15:50
This is just delightful! Thanks so much for sharing!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 10 July 2003 20:10
BC

Again beautiful. You just reminded me of my dad. Thank you for the beautiful memory.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 11 July 2003 00:53
I liked Jaynes reaction to it all. :)
Friday, 11 July 2003 02:54
Shiny!!!

Have to get my wife to read this one!!
Sunday, 13 July 2003 01:31
Fluff? What fluff?! the challenge may have been fluffy, but this fic certainly wasn't: humor, true characters, true dynamics, and fleeting and subtle angst over the past. Just beautiful *sniff*

Jayne made me laugh each and every time. Loved Mal's devotion to Kaylee that let him humble himself to coax the horse closer. Love that even though on one hand he is sacrificing his pride to do this favor, it was something that he longs for deep down that he wouldn't have allowed himself to indulge in only for himself. Incredibly heartbreaking, even though only hinted at.
Sunday, 13 July 2003 04:14
That was shiny! Very well written and touching. Warm fuzzy feeling all over. Two very enthusiastic thumbs up. :-)
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 25 January 2004 18:30
Love this, I could *so* see Kaylee and Mal acting like this and Jayne's *not impressed* attitude was spot on. Great, very lovely and heart warming. Totally epitomised the bond between Mal and Kaylee. Very shiny, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 08 December 2005 16:36
aah, so sweet!!!

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