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Fightin' Dirty

Thursday, July 10, 2003

Mal never had a chance. Rating's there for a couple non kid-friendly words.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 5408    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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I’m not Joss, please don’t sue me.

Ok, I know I said y’all were gonna get the longer fic first, but that one’s still undergoing renovations. Here’s a silly little ficlet I came up with awhile back. Please tell me what ya think, and enjoy!

Fightin’ Dirty

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She caught him just outside of the common area.

Rusty, winding pipes with fading green vines painted on them snaked from the ceiling and twisted into the wall behind her, disappearing into the innards of the boat. Something clicked and whirred in the floor vent on her left, and she smiled at him.

All normal. He saw her everyday; saw these pipes and heard the engine thrumming. It was all perfectly normal… but it wasn’t. Something about the way she was looking at him.

“Hey there, little Kaylee,” he greeted.

“Hey, cap’n,” she said, still smiling. Normal.

He stepped past her, and she stayed where she was, but watched as he started down the hall.

“Wash says we’re gonna set down in ‘bout an hour.”

Reynolds hesitated, and turned to face her. She was still staring at him like that. “That somehow a bad thing?”

She leaned against the bulkhead in front of him, and her tone was indifferent, almost as if she was casually reminding him of a past conversation. “She’s runnin’ dry.”

That was it. That was why she was looking at him like that. He knew what she was about to say, having heard it from her almost every time they refueled the ship. He had a reply all mapped out.

“Mid-grade cells, Kaylee. Same stuff we always get.”

She finally stopped with the look. Kaylee cocked her head to one side and regarded him with hopeful eyes in the dimly lit hallway. “Oh, come on, captain. You never buy the chroma blend; we can’t try it just this once?” she asked, now sounding far from indifferent.

She was still smiling.

Rut. He couldn’t say no to her, not now. If he denied her request for that high-dollar fuel she was always begging him for, she would stop smiling.

And that would screw up his whole gorram day.

He tried it indirectly, s

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 10 July 2003 06:25
Very good Issy. I'm lovin the whole Kaylee/Mal brother/sister relationship. It's perfect.
Thursday, 10 July 2003 06:27
<<<<Very good Issy. I'm lovin the whole Kaylee/Mal brother/sister relationship. It's perfect.>>>>

was done by me. I don't know why this site will not keep me logged in when I come to the blue sun room. SHEESH!

Anyhoo, great fic Boo!
LJC
Thursday, 10 July 2003 15:50
Yay! This is just *perfect* vintage Kaylee. Mal didn't stand a chance!
Thursday, 10 July 2003 17:05
Shiny! I like the engine techy stuff at the beginning. Your Kaylee voice is just great.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 10 July 2003 20:04
BC

Beautiful! Mal knew he was beat the minute she talked to him. Ha, ha, ha.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 10 July 2003 22:46
I'm giving this one a 10 because I was ruttin pissed off before I read this ficlet and now...hey, I'm smiling too!
Thanks

Ty
Friday, 11 July 2003 04:26
Loved this. Great view of Mal and the relationship he has with Kaylee. Especially loved these lines:

You can lead an army into certain death, withstand hours of torture, and keep this crew alive during the most impossible situations. Yet you are rendered completely powerless when Kaywinnit Lee Frye confronts you with a smile and a pair of pleading eyes, his inner voice chastised.

Keep it up.
Sunday, 13 July 2003 01:21
How you *do* put a smile on my face!

Loved how you described everything seeming normal but not, loved the mechanical bent of the conversation, so fitting for Kaylee, love how Mal's downfall sneaks up on him unawares, and I love that Mal loves it all in the end.

Kaylee knows what's best for Serenity better than Mal does. Nice little bit of the true 'verse in that.

Excellent mood, excellent voices and writing. Well done and smiles all around!

:D
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 14 July 2003 18:06
Loverly!
You've got the voices and interaction just right. Keep it up. :-)
I really enjoy reading your work.
Wednesday, 30 July 2003 01:12
I loved this to itty bitty pieces. The whole Kaylee/Mal dynamic is wonderful and you have captured it effortlessly. It was priceless seeing Kaylee deconstruct the Captain's intention to decide what should or should not be the fuel they ran on. And you can tell that he knows she is right even at the start, it's just an attempt to hang on to his pride that is failing him. So loved this. But then, just like Kaylee, I love my Captain... Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 16 August 2003 07:38
this was really good, hilarious. I love the sister/brother thing between Mal and Kaylee. More importantly, I think this could actually happen, you know if they were real (Which in my mind they are)

Keep writing, please
Tuesday, 16 December 2003 01:27
I really love the feel of this one, and Mal's internal dialogue, please keep writing
Tuesday, 15 June 2004 15:12
Poor Mal... Never had a gorram chance...

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