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The Girl and Jayne Cobb Part 3

Tuesday, August 12, 2008

River reveals her past to the only person on Serenity that doesn't want to <i>fix</i> her.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3474    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Title: The Girl and Jayne Cobb

Author: Instant Karma Girl

Date: Started July 2008 – Ended August 2008

Words: 45,734 (Entire Story – all parts)

Disclaimer: Joss is Boss and I would do nothing to detract from him. He and others own the ‘Verse…I just wish they played in it again.

Author’s Note: I haven’t provided translations for the Chinese because they didn’t on the show and if you use your imagination (and a translator), you can get the gist. This is my first Firefly fic. I hope you like it!

Thank you Michelle!!

When we landed on Eirene, all of my stuff was packed. All my weapons were in my crate, all my clothes were in my bag. I looked around my bunk and there was nothing of me left in it. Eirene was not the best planet for a mercenary to find work, since everything was for the most part peaceful and utopian there. But it would have to do.

I took a deep breath and moved through the door. When I got to the catwalk, I heard Mal say “Where the hell’s Jayne?” I smiled just a little, then descended down the stairs. Mal started explaining the mission, musta thought that I was just coming down to join them, but when I didn’t stop, his words died off. Musta saw all my stuff too.

I walked right past all of them. Didn’t want to look because I’d see Kaylee looking at me with those eyes that’d be full of saddness. I have to admit, I’d miss that girl. Hell, I’d probably end up missin’ all of them at some point. Zoe and I had some times, laughing at the captian’s expense, but she was the captain’s man through and through. Just ask Wash. And Inara, she’d been kind to me, not in the sexual way, but in a way of understanding that perhaps there was more to me than what I showed.

The bay doors were open and I was almost through them when Mal stopped me, his hand on my shoulder. “Where you going, Jayne? I’m in the middle of explaining the job.”

“Yeah, about that. Think you’re gonna be one merc short, *Captain*,” I said, stressing his title.

He shook his head. “Not quite understa

Comments
Wednesday, 13 August 2008 12:06
This is really good, and works well from Jayne's POV. But someone is following them, and River calls him/her the 'tricky fox' ... someone we know, perhaps? And are you honestly intending for Jayne and River never to go back to Serenity? As Mal always said, safest place is keeping moving, and they never stop moving.
Wednesday, 13 August 2008 14:32
Whew...I read that so damn fast....wow...may I say that I am speechless and I have no words to describe how your writing is so phenomenal? And how hot the kiss scenes are even though you hardly describe anything cause yuo don't need too?

Please please update soon as my very existence depends on it!
GOLDENWOLF
Thursday, 14 August 2008 01:59
I have to admit...i have never like Jayne/River pairing before. Too much of an age difference. Your story however, is so well written and makes sense. It was so good and changed my mind so much, that this is the first comment I have made for any fanfic...ever! All I can say is bravo. I can't wait for part 4! Your writing is fantastic!
Thursday, 14 August 2008 03:51
Eeeeeeeh! Suspense! Again, love your character voices and Jayne and River’s interactions. My most favorite part was River’s playing house, fanaticizing about the what ifs and how she finally gets Jayne to play along. So Beautiful.

The paralleled flashbacks were also great. I love when Sarah says, “You’re not a killer, Jayne. You’re a healer.” That Jayne had it in him to do good things at a young age, but because of circumstance, he took a more vengeful path. Very believable.

I’m curious to know how many more chapters we get to read…

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