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The Girl and Jayne Cobb Part 1

Monday, August 11, 2008

River reveals her past to the one person on Serenity that doesn't want to <i>fix</i> her.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3397    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Title: The Girl and Jayne Cobb

Author: Instant Karma Girl

Date: Started July 2008 – Ended August 2008

Words: 45,734 (Entire Story – all parts)

Disclaimer: Joss is Boss and I would do nothing to detract from him. He and others own the ‘Verse…I just wish they played in it again.

Author’s Note: I haven’t provided translations for the Chinese because they didn’t on the show and if you use your imagination (and a translator), you can get the gist. This is my first Firefly fic. I hope you like it!

Thank you Michelle!!

It was about a month after we buried our folk, Mr. Universe, Shepherd Book, and Wash, that I found myself up late at night. I had thought everyone was sleeping, the ship on auto pilot, but I was wrong. There she was, the little crazy girl, or so I used to call her. She was down in the cargo hold, dancing.

I’ve never been one for dancing, especially without music, but this girl…you could tell she had a symphony in her head, the way she danced. I stood back, up on the steel catwalk, looking down at her. I felt like I was holding my breath as I watched her swirl and twirl, her long purple skirt swishin’ this way and that. I don’t know why I didn’t want to be seen by her, but I knew I didn’t want her to stop that dancing.

It’s not like I’ve really paid all that much attention to her since her haughty brother lugged her on this boat. I sure did notice when she sliced me with that knife. And after that, all the attention I paid her was to see what weapon she might be holding and how much money I thought she’d be worth. But ever since landing on Miranda, seeing her filled with the nothingness of the dead, I’ve taken to watchin’ her a little closer. The doctor and the captain, and well, damn near everyone thought she was doing much better. That the outing of what happened on Miranda had been healin’ for her. Now, I reckon I agree, but not completely. I’ve watched. I’ve seen her get quiet. I feel like I’ve seen those flashes in her mind. Whether she’s thinkin’ of all those Reavers

Comments
Monday, 11 August 2008 18:34
This was really sweet!!!

Keep flying ;)
Monday, 11 August 2008 18:40
GGGAAAHHH!!! SQUEE!!! This is so totally amazing! I love how it is Jayne's PoV...I've never seen that before, very original and unique.

I think Jayne's voice is very unique and I adore how soft he is with River.

I'm terribly excited for the next part...hurry please!
Monday, 11 August 2008 18:53
I just have to comment on this fic because I am thoroughly enjoying reading this story. Its great, and I love that it is Jayne's POV. I really hope you continue this story soon, because it is so awesome.
Tuesday, 12 August 2008 00:37
Normally I’m not one for first person, but this was excellent. You’re doing a great job of keeping Jayne himself on the outside, but letting us hear a different voice. Having him actually experience River’s pain is a smart way to finally get him to relate to her.

Love the dialogue here and how you’ve captured River. You’ve struck the right balance of wistful innocence and unassuming wisdom. Can’t wait to read the next bit…
Tuesday, 12 August 2008 07:55
Excellent! Going to read part II now.
Tuesday, 12 August 2008 12:39
Very awesome.

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