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The Slower Path: Weighing the Costs - Part 10 - Sequel to While the Cat's Away

Monday, April 21, 2008

Things haven't gone well on Verbena

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3844    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The Slower Path:

Sequel to

by and

Rating: PG

Word Count: 2885

Spoilers: Set post BDM

Pairing/Characters: Mal, Zoe, Mal/Inara.

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Zoe pinched the cut closed and deftly slipped the needle through two folds of skin, closing the wound with practiced movements. "Hurt much?" she asked, knowing the answer already.

"Son of a-- Yes!" Mal complained, wincing at her less than gentle treatment. His hand came up involuntarily and he had to force it into a fist to keep from yanking the needle out of her hand. Another Chinese expletive flew from his lips as she drew the waxed thread through his eyebrow, tugging on it firmly when it caught stub

Comments
Monday, 21 April 2008 10:17
I just loved this especially the dialogue between Zoe and Mal as she stitches up his small hurts and then between Inara and Mal over the cortex. Very fine story, all the more to savour because it isn't rushed. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 21 April 2008 12:56
the characters breathe - the dialog is unforced - and the pleasure of reading continues!
Monday, 21 April 2008 23:52
You two write the best Zoe and the best Zoe and Mal around. This is exactly how I see their relationship.

And the cortex conversation, and the awkward steps and the revealing little by little, almost by accident- great stuff!
Wednesday, 23 April 2008 03:13
Wow this was wonderful! Loved the insight into Mal's and Zoe's thoughts that sounded like they came straight from the real character. Loved the growth taking place in Mal that will make it possible to have a real relationship. And as usual, your wrting is fabulous! Waiting eagerly for more.
Thursday, 24 April 2008 18:19
I think what I love about your writing style is the details: the tug of the thread, Serenity in her sleep mode, the worn blankets and creaky cots.

But the thing I really enjoy is the love the characters have for each other and how you convey that even when they're angry with each other.


Friday, 02 May 2008 13:57
You guys, this is excellent. Excellent excellent and I loved it so much, every word, every breath, every unintended and embarrasing double entendre. You rule and I am so happy you are keeping this going. I can't believe you were *ever* uncertain of your Zoe.

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