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Crew, But Not - Chapter 6

Wednesday, November 14, 2007

Finally, a new chapter! The cargo comes aboard, and Simon starts creating patient profiles.

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Chapter 6

Mal appeared surprised as he exited the shuttle to the almost distant buzz of violins and the trill of flute, followed quickly by Kaylee’s bright laugh. He took a couple steps forward, and his mouth twisted as the thought crossed his mind that he recognized that piece.

“Gorramit, they’ve gone and made us all civilized,” commented Jayne disgustedly.

Zoe merely made a noise that sounded more satisfactory than not, and walked down the steps into the cargo bay.

No one in the kitchen looked up as the other crew members came in, but whether it was intentional ignoring or distraction was not obvious. Jayne was never one to stand around, and marched past it all with a grunt to sit down and watch Kaylee set up the pieces for another game of checkers, though Book had apparently gone to take some rest.

At the same time, Mal spoke: “Ahem? The job, folks?”

“Oh, right,” said Wash, looking up from where he had Simon’s encyclopedia in several pieces on the kitchen table. “So sorry, Captain, for entertaining ourselves instead of waiting patiently until your newest order came in.”

“We got ourselves a pickup,” said Mal, ignoring that. “The cargo’s waiting, and there’s a landing platform—bit oddly shaped, but I trust your skills.”

“Back to work then,” said Wash. “Party’s over, folks.” He rose with a little sigh and headed for the door.

“Didn’t say that,” said Mal, almost protesting but not quite.

“How big a cargo, Cap’n?” asked Kaylee, putting away the board despite Mal’s words.

“Big,” said Mal. “In fact, we’ll need to clear up some leftover business so as not to have the goods mix. Doc, your cryo box will need to find a new home.”

“I see,” said Simon, attempting to reassemble his encyclopedia, a slightly overwhelmed hopelessness on his face.

“Why didn’t y’ sell it on Boros?” asked Kaylee, stepping in out of pity to tidy up Wash’s leavings and hand the new and improved encyclopedia to Simon.

“Ah—” began Simon, and then words failed him. There were a few good reasons—no time, too su

Comments
Wednesday, 14 November 2007 17:10
Actually, it's kinda fun being in the dark over River - makes me feel like one of the gang! This is shaping up really well, and you have all the voices down perfectly, particularly Mal's. And as for Jayne being petulant ... there's somthing I'd like to have seen on the screen!
Wednesday, 14 November 2007 18:14
Excellent as usual! I adored the beginning when River scared Jayne into tipping over the chair. And Simon's reaction was perfectly in character.

Everyone's reactions were great. And I like not knowing what River is doing. Because its Simon's pov, we shouldn't know, and I'm glad you're writing it that way!

I'd rather be kept in the dark, just like in the show!
Thursday, 15 November 2007 02:56
River's explanations usually make sense after repaeat viewings or when more of the story is revealed. I think you're doing great.
Thursday, 15 November 2007 06:56
love the Simon,Inara, and Mal infirmary scene with slight undertones of jealosy on Mal's part. Inara would be Simon's civilized haven on that boat and she was always in the Tam's corner from day one.

characterizations are good.. I never get River clues so I'm no help there,
I'll have to wait for your next post
Thursday, 15 November 2007 11:48
very much enjoyed this!:)

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