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SECOND CHANCES: Chapter 20

Saturday, June 16, 2007

Mal takes tea with Inara's mother while River asks Simon to do the impossible. Simon/Kaylee, Mal/Inara, River/Rafe

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A/N: Sorry for the delay - real life reared its ugly head again!

Please keep commenting ... the story is winding down!

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Chapter 20

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Zoe surveyed the room before her with an impassable expression. She’d already steeled herself during the twenty minute ride to the holding cell for the scene she’d be witness to. She knew it would not be pleasant, it would probably smell and the sight would more violently turn her stomach than the idea. She’d been right on all counts.

Jayne tensed beside her, his hand automatically reaching at his waist to clutch his non-existent sidearm. He had one on him, but it was hidden beneath the suit jacket Simon and Inara had insisted he wear to keep up appearances. Pressing his lips into a thin white line, he caught Zoe’s gaze from the corner of his eye and gave her an almost imperceptible nod.

“You Zelda?” A man’s gruff voice intruded on their silent conversation and Zoe turned towards the speaker. His age was impossible to ascertain, his skin lined with a myriad of wrinkles that had more than likely been caused by smoke, sunlight and exposure to a variety of other harsh elements, including violence. He was balding, what was left of his brownish hair cut close to his head and his eyes were beady, barely more than slits, making it futile to try and guess at a color.

Nodding, Zoe told him, “Yeah. I’ve been sent by my boss, Mister Wu. You got some folks for me to look at?”

The other man hobbled towards them, favoring his right leg. Both Zoe and Jayne made note of the weakness – it might come in handy later. With a tip of his chin, he motioned to two other men, both armed, standing on opposite sides of the room. They disappeared through a door at the back, returning a few moments later with about thirty slaves. The prisoners were ushered into this small holding area all looking frightened. Children, ranging in age from five to twelve clung to nearby adults, only peeking out

Comments
Saturday, 16 June 2007 08:51
Them gorram slavers have killed Kaylee's dad? I hope when the rest of the family is safe those evil men get what they deserve but I still can't believe you had him die. I just hope Zoe and Jayne can pull it off and get the rest out of there in one piece. And poor River, my heart goes out to her, wanting so much to be a normal girl. Now Simon is expected to fix that, no pressure! Looks like Mal is about to find out the truth about Inara's baby. Can't wait to see what happens next, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 16 June 2007 08:55
How can you say this is winding down? The angst is well up on the meter!

How could you kill Mr Frye, off-screen? Hope it was doing something heroic, like defending his family.

And River's conversation with Simon is just so her. I hope she can see that everyone is a mix of a lot of different things, and she can be too. Rafe loves her, and that's the main thing.

And Mal? Can't wait to see his reaction to Lili's tale ...
Saturday, 16 June 2007 09:12
Poor Mr. Frye!

I hope those slavers ger caught by Reavers! That would teach them.

I hope they get the rest of the folk, Kaylee's gonna be sad enough as it is.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

XD
Saturday, 16 June 2007 11:20
ACH! Poor Simon. I mean, no pressure or anything. Where exactly is he supposed to start?

Brilliant chapter, as always. Loved Zoe, she isn't one of my favourite characters but something about the way you write her makes her always stick in my head afterwards. So kudos.

And Mal, Mal, Mal. Inara will not be pleased that you've been snooping.


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Saturday, 16 June 2007 13:03
Excellent chapter! Everything moving along at an intriguing pace. Sorry about Mr. Frye, but realistic given the fact that his family was taken by slavers!
Tuesday, 19 June 2007 05:44
Oh TamSibling....every time you post something, whether it be a chapter of this series or an unrelated storyline, I suddenly get very humble and wonder how someone is supposed to compete (even informally) with this!

Honestly? This chapter just oozes brilliance! All the major participants get the moment to shine, even when they're weighed down by all kinds of angst - and the plot twists delivered here are on par with Joss' work IMO. Though I really dread witnessing how Kaylee will react knowing that her father failed to make it back safely...I imagine this will push her to a point farther than she's gone bar the reaction she had when she found out her family's transport had gotten hijacked:(

Though I have to say this before I finish my feedback: the Simon-River scene? The epitome of superb dialogue and characterization, since we are given a spectacular look at their sibling bond and the pain that both Tams feel over their individual burdens. That and River's tearful plea to Simon to fix her so she can feel love with the same intensity for Rafe that he feels for her...I was honestly wanting to bawl my eyes out at River's faith in Simon and Simon's struggle not to crush River's hopes for a future. Something tells me that River needs to talk with Zoë about the struggle to be both warrior and woman without sacrificing parts of one for the other....some fantastic work could be done there :D

BEB

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