Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

What's meant to be - Part 3

Friday, June 15, 2007

Ok guys ... I really need those comments now cause I need to decide some mighty Important things...like ending or not ... dead or alive...and some others so...HELP!!! I'm putting some fluff here...

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Next Morning at breakfast

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Mal didn't show up at breakfast and the gathered crew was starting to worry,

"Why is the captain blaming himself? It's not like its his fault or anything..." said a sleepy Kaylee already wrapped up in Simon's arms

"Well Kaylee bird, the captain feels very protective towards us that's why he blames himself for everything. But Inara's got his heart..."

Suddenly the small alarm in Simon's pocket started beeping and vibrating.

"Oh NO!!"

"What's happening Simon?" asked Kaylee while the others rushed with them .

"Inara's fighting for life again.."and he disappeared in the infirmary.

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Mal's bunk

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Mal was sitting at the edge of his bed, with a white gold braclet with dimonds in his palm. If only his mother could be here to give him an advice...she already did that but altough he was very independent, when it came to women he felt like a five-year-old.But he has to do it... at least for his heart's sake, besides Inara has the right to know what are his true feelings for her.

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Galley

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He knew he was late for breakfast, but he also knew that by this time the crew should still be eating infact there were plates in front of the usual chairs with food in them.

"Well" he sighed, he knew it was time he grabbed some bacon and headed to the infirmary. It was there when he found the crew.

Kaylee was crying and River had teary eyes, Jayne was Strangely silent looking at his feet like Zoe.

"Wha-"

"Playing with death.... playing with fire...Burned..." answered a now weeping River, he looked pleadingly at Zoe

"Internal bleeding, sir"

But this time he couldn't take no more and he slid down the wall while his world faded away.

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When he woke, he

Comments
Saturday, 16 June 2007 05:07
So what do you think???
Saturday, 16 June 2007 06:20
Keep going! More please!

Vera
KK
Sunday, 17 June 2007 03:31
LoL...I love the crew's reaction. Great fic ya got working here! My only suggestion would be to work on Inara's speech....she sounds a bit off. Everyone else though sounds exactly like in the movie! Keep it up!
Tuesday, 19 June 2007 04:59
Other than the odd misstep with character voices - can't see Simon using the nickname "Kaylee bird" when referring to Kaylee, and Inara seemed a tad bit off but she's been through a lot in this tale, so that's understandable;D) - this was some excellent work:D

BEB
Thursday, 21 June 2007 13:46
this was brillant keep going more please

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