Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

What's meant to be - Part 2

Thursday, June 14, 2007

Can River knock some brains in Mal's head? Is Inara really leaving? How can Kaylee help?

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Inara's shuttle

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“Tonight it's terribly cold" she thought out loud while preparing a cup of tea. This had been a one stressful day for her she waved the training house that she'll be returning Sheydra and the girls were really happy about it, but Sheydra knew something was amiss Inara was paler then ever.

"Dear, have you been eating lately? you look just as pretty but I'm caring for your health."

"Well, Sheydra I wasn't really hungry and I just feel a bit dizzy sometimes but I think it's an effect of the black" Sheydra knew she was lying but for now she let it slip.

"Yes... so I'll see you here?"

"Yes, bye sheydra"

"Bye"

She drank her tea and fell asleep

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Mal's bunk

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Mal was uselessly running his hand through his hair while River was weeping silently she knew something bad was about to happen but she didn't know what.

"Little albatross, Inara don't give a damn what my feelings are cause if it really was for Kaylee she wouldn't be leaving now, but that was just the right excuse for going back to her whorin'"

"That's not true and you know it, you're just excusing yourself and I really never dreamt of saying this but you're even more a boob than Simon!!"

"Get out albatross"

And she obeyed.

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Simon's bunk

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Kaylee was happy, a lot, but still coudn't sleep even if she was wrapped safely in Simon's arms. She couldn't get Inara and the captain outside her head, Inara was a big sister to her and was sure as hell she loved Mal but they were so stubborn and that worried her. Mal almost died last time she left and she knew he wasn't going to bear it, even Zoe said so.

"Simon.."

"Tell me sweetheart"

"Do you think Inara and the Capn' will be together?

"I can't really anwer that quetion Kaylee as they're more stubborn than these here walls but I think somehow they'll work it out. Now sleep you'll need to talk to Serenity tommorow"

"Yep goo

Comments
Thursday, 14 June 2007 15:07
Please tell me what do you think...
KK
Friday, 15 June 2007 02:23
Very interesting! It kept my attention. And you did better with the descriptions and the slowing down. Keep up the good work!
Friday, 15 June 2007 04:33
thanks :) I'm trying to give more details while writing but still I want to keep suspense...
Monday, 18 June 2007 14:25
Some excellent work, but I think you would benefit from having a beta reader to look over things, KiMbEr. There's all kinds of good stuff here, but it's kinda hidden under some rough spelling, punctuation and formatting.

BEB

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