Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Possibilities

Thursday, April 12, 2007

Simon wrestles with right and wrong.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 1851    RATING: 8.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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He paced the infirmary.

From the door to the back counter and back again.

Seven long steps. Sixteen small ones.

There and back again.

Each circuit got him no closer to a plan. No idea what to say. No idea if he should say anything at all.

He had asked him too. Had trusted him to do this for him, if he died.

And he wasn’t sure if he should.

He had promised him, a promise to a dead man. A promise from a doctor to his patient.

He didn’t think he should keep it.

Zoë hurt so much.

How would this help?

And how fair would it be to the child?

A mother, but no father.

Born when its father lay cold in the ground. CONCIEVED when its father was dead.

But he had promised doctor to patient. Friend to friend.

He had to tell her.

But how?

Comments
Thursday, 12 April 2007 06:12
Cool concept. I like have captured it in so few words, but still built some nice tension.
Thursday, 12 April 2007 08:23
I could see Wash having his sperm saved 'just in case' and Simon's dilemna is realistic. How Zoe will react though will be interesting as I think it will give her purpose, something to hang on to and someone to live for. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 15 April 2007 18:35
Ok...now we need Zoe's reaction to Simon's eventual action of carrying out Wash's wish. Gonna be a doozy, I gotta think...cuz the fight between joy and rage that would go on in Zoe's head? Serenity Valley would pale in comparison...

BEB
ELLAGREGGS
Friday, 19 March 2010 23:18
I love the little touch:

"Seven long steps. Sixteen small ones." Perfectly captures the image of someone whose paced back and forth so much that they've taken to pacing in a variety of ways just to break the monotony.

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