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CHECK MATE: Pinned. (19/22)

Wednesday, July 28, 2004

Mal and Zoe pay Monty a visit. They don't get along. Kaylee pursues Simon some more, River reads Book's mind and Wash 'meets' an important new person.

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CHECK MATE: Pinned.

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Zoe takes a deep breath and straightens up. “Monty's ship is a Magpie.”

“Monty?” Kaylee frowns, bewildered. “Monty from the war?”

“The very same. Without whom Cap'n'd be short of more'n a few teeth. Yeah. Monty,” Zoe replies grimly.

Wash takes her hand. “Magpie's are crappy old boats, bao bei. Poor manoeuvrability. Which makes them cheap. Very cheap. Not impossible others might buy 'em.”

Zoe looks him steadily in the eye, her expression deep and unfathomable. “Not impossible,” she echoes, but the words carry no conviction.

Kaylee raises a tentative hand. “Shou'n't we be tellin' the Cap'n about this?”

Zoe is just about to suggest a delay whilst she tries to work out the implications of their discovery when Mal's head pops up above the top of the ladder.

“Tell the Captain what?” he asks expectantly.

“'Fraid I may have oversold my husband's abilities, Sir,” Zoe improvises swiftly, ignoring Wash who's doing a melodramatic mime of being offended. “We got somethin' but he's findin' it hard to distinguish between a couple of models.”

“OK,” Mal says. “Jus' let me know when you got somethin' useful.” And he disappears back down the ladder. Zoe feels the same kind of relief she did in the war when an incoming seeker fell wide of her position. Meanwhile Kaylee chews her bottom lip and wonders why they're lyin' to the Cap'n.

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Mal hasn't eaten a meal with his crew since Inara died. Kaylee ain't sure he's eaten much of anything. So it's a surprise to everyone when at 20:00 hours, he appears in the kitchen. Mealtimes haven't felt the same without him at the head of the table and most of the crew have been living off snacks, snatching a bowl of protein here or a hot drink there as the fancy takes them. Refuelling rather than dining together.

Mal looks disappointed and disoriented to see his people scattered around the kitchen and commons area. He'd been ho

Comments
Wednesday, 28 July 2004 17:06
Shiny!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 28 July 2004 17:28
Love this series. Keep up the good work!
Wednesday, 28 July 2004 17:37
Thanks for the encouragement, folks. Really struggled with this chapter.

Forgot to say, I'm away for a week so probably a fortnight til the next instalment.
Wednesday, 28 July 2004 17:37
Well, this is going well - Excepting, of course, the other subplots that promise even worse trouble for our heroes. Good chapter, this one!
Wednesday, 28 July 2004 19:59
Poor Mal, every time he learns something new it's even more weight for him to gorram carry. Was surprised Monty got to live through all that revelation and such like. As for Saffron, I think that *pofu* still has a lot of ugly up her sleeve. Shiny, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 28 July 2004 21:39
Aaaah! So good. Every word worked for me. All the actions and events too. I particularly liked that Zoe fully expected Mal to blow Monty's brains out--that's what really sold that scene.

Thanks for sharing your writing!

*and if you wondered, yes, I put Mal & Zoe's meet with Monty in Blue Sun Job 17 on Three Hills 'cause of your story ;-) Though 'my' Three Hills is more industrial.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 29 July 2004 12:47
"Something inside Mal bursts. A dam of pain and loss and rage so powerful he can only ride its wave." Oh. Oh my.

This story *still* keeps getting better - how do you do that? *g* HurrySundown
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 11 February 2006 19:58
wow.............srry if i sound dumb but wow :) not mocking god wish i could write like that
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 11 February 2006 19:59
SHINY very vshiny
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 11 February 2006 20:00
KEEP ON WRITING

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