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CHECK MATE: A different strategy. (17/22)

Thursday, July 15, 2004

Long, pretty miserable. Don't say I didn't warn you!

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With apologies to the Mal/Inara 'shippers (of whom I am one). It's only a story – and not even one of Joss'.

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CHECK MATE: A different strategy.

This chapter and the next overlap with "If the coat fits" posted here a few months back.

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Light as a ghost, River follows them as they carry the body into the infirmary. Mal supporting the head and shoulders, Jayne holding the legs. She lets out a hiss as if in pain as they lay it down on the exam table. “It hurt.”

Simon is mortified. There are times when, much as he loves her, he'd like to duct-tape his sister's mouth shut. Mal seems not to have heard but all the same Simon grabs River by the shoulders and tries to push her out of the room. “Shh, mei-mei. Don't ...” Don't make it worse. Don't use that unnatural gift of yours to channel her dying thoughts. I can't bear it. He can't bear it. Shouldn't have to.

“The wanting,” River attempts to clarify as he shuts the door on her.

Mal cocks his head to one side and frowns. “Not sure this is her, Jayne.” He shakes his head. “Not in this light. Mouth's all wrong.”

Simon's blood runs cold. Ofcourse it's her. Those are her clothes, her jewellery. Who in the diyu else would it be? Granted, she's battered and bloodied and her eyelids have swollen shut but there can be no doubt. Not unless you have a desperate need to believe otherwise.

Mal folds his arms high across his chest, tucking his hands into his armpits. “No. Definitely not her. Can't be. You ever see her wear this thing?”

Only a few times, Mal, but yes, I've seen her wear it, Simon wants to tell him. Only he doesn't. The thought that he might be the one to burst the Captain's bubble is too painful. The truth will hit him soon enough. Slam into him and flatten him with its horror. For now, let him cling to his disbelief.

“I'll..I'll clean her up. If you like.” Simon offers, more because doing something – anything – is better than simply standing here, looking at the ruin of that beautiful, graceful woman he considered

Comments
Thursday, 15 July 2004 11:29
Okay, this is very different and all kinds of painful and sad and begging for exploring. Love River as always and I really like all the little touches giving glimpses of what all the others are feeling. Very neat. Also can't wait to hear what Mal is going to learn from House Madrassa. I hope River can keep him from falling into those *tamade hundans* trap. Good myth, keep going and be still oh fragile heart of mine! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 15 July 2004 16:56
Yes, bleak and unhappy, but quite powerful. You played the emotion and impact very well. Interesting the way you pulled away from using Mal's POV, letting us see through other's reactions instead. It worked.

Mal's denial of Inara being dead was totally creepifying but quite good, and appropriate. There's been so much of death not being permament, that it worked in an extremely chilling way.

Many good lines. I especially liked Zoe's, "Zoe has seen him like this before. Shut down, like none of it touches him. Almost convincing himself. She wishes this time – this time especially - he would let the pain boil up and spill over, instead of letting it burn out another piece of his heart." I--obviously--find Zoe & Mal's relationship one of the most intriguing amongst the characters, and have found your presentation of Zoe in this series very powerful and well done in a low-key way.



Thursday, 15 July 2004 17:33
If only Firefly were more like Enterprise, we could pick-up an Inara-clone later! But no, this is a good, involving story, with lots of mysteries that beg revelation - Soon, I hope!
Thursday, 15 July 2004 22:35
Eee-ook!

Sad, tense and painful. Good stuff. Well, bad... er, y'know.
Friday, 16 July 2004 11:51
Yeah, clone would be bad. But how about an Inara zombie? BRAAAAIIIINS!!!!!

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