Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

You're Beautiful

Friday, November 24, 2006

Not at all related to my current series. What if Simon and River had left Serenity? Takes place 3 years after they leave. Set to the song You're Beautiful by James Blunt.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3643    RATING: 8.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer: The characters all belong to Joss Whedon

Rating: G

Un-beta'd again so there are probably alot of mistakes, frankly I don't care. It was a spontaneous thing. "You're Beautiful" came on the radio and this thought came to mind. It's very short. Listening to "You're Beautiful" really adds to the affect but it's up to you. Did I mention it's very hard to type when you're crying?

You're Beautiful

The streets of Persephone were crowded, it was by the most amazing chance that they would meet. It had been three years since he left, and he had regretted that decision for all three of them. Simon had been walking along the streets looking for some sign of something, anything he didn’t know what. He had been lost since River’s death, barely able to get by. He was looking around Persephone when he saw her. He stopped instantly. It was Kaylee, the woman he had been to stupid to ever show his true feelings to. She was with someone else, someone he didn’t know but he could see from her face and the way she looked at the man that they were in love. He was happy for her, happy that one of them had been able to move on. She was pregnant. For a moment Simon imagined himself next to her, happy with their own child. He wasn’t the same man anymore though, he wasn’t the man she loved. He had grown a beard, he didn’t like it but he had stopped caring about himself long ago. His clothes were torn nothing like his past life. His spirit had died the day he left Serenity, all that was left was his body, waiting to do the same.

Kaylee had been chatting happily with her husband Rick when she turned back and saw someone she never thought she would see again, Simon. He was close and she was compelled to go speak to him when she realized something. It may have been Simon, but it wasn’t the same Simon she had once loved. His eyes, his beautiful blue eyes she had loved so much, were now dull and grey, they looked dead. His clothes were very worn and he looked dirty. He wasn’t really Simon anymore, and it made her sa

Comments
Saturday, 25 November 2006 00:33
Wow. That is beautiful. Are you the one doing the song project? I was thinking of doing the same thing (stories from song titles) and maybe beta for eachother?? Kelai (kelai.deviantart.com -- should join, your writing rocks!)
Saturday, 25 November 2006 01:11
Ok...to prevent a purple llama from eating all my socks (which I have only gotten all clean again), I will say this:

Damn! This is some darkly brilliant stuff you posted here, Gomithrous! Definitely love "What if...?" scenarios, and "The Tams leaving Serenity at Beaumonde" is a completely shiny idea to work off of. But did ya have to kill off everyone but Kaylee, Simon and I presume Inara?

BEB
Saturday, 25 November 2006 12:47
Oy, this is sad ... I can see Simon wandering aimlessly if River was gone and he'd left Serenity. I kind of wish Kaylee wasn't married so that Simon could be happy once again ... but we all know our favorite cheery mechanic has got too much love to give.

Dark and moving, thanks for sharing!
Saturday, 25 November 2006 13:44
Wow, I'm so glad people are liking my stuff so far. I don't yet have a beta-reader (but I'll definitely talk to you Kelia) so I'm a little reluctant to post my stuff, but I do have the sequel to "Going Well" all written up and 3 pages of ideas as to what to do with the next chapters. I also have one called "Interesting Day" which I am in the middle of, you might get what it's about if you watch the pilot but I'm not telling. Thank you all so much for commenting, I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Sunday, 26 November 2006 01:00
There isn't enough 'what if's' around (someone should do a collection) but this is really sweet. I know you were writing to a somg but maybe you could expand this a bit? Anyway nice work!
Sunday, 26 November 2006 20:27
Said before, can't stand those purple llamas. The white ones are OK.

But I picked up a major mistake in line 4-- " River died."

Ya owe us either an explanation or the story.
Wednesday, 03 January 2007 22:42
No purple llamas here. would like to see more of how that story got to where it's at.
Wednesday, 03 January 2007 23:08
Explanation: A what if Simon and River left Serenity as in the battle at the Maidenhead never happened. My idea was that maybe the crew would've been captured by the Alliance asking where River went and it didn't go well or something happened involving Reavers. The reason kaylee survived is because she left Serenity when Simon and River did (she was very upset). She went on with her life, met new people and got married. Simon and River were eventually tracked by the Alliance, River was taken most likely killed and Simon was left alone. Simon would be very upset as well, probably giving up hope. That's where this fic comes in.

I was listening to the radio while reading Cruel Summer by Wanmei and You're Beatiful came on. I had S/K fresh in my mind so it pretty much wrote itself. And now I am scarred for life, every time I hear that song I cry. Hope this cleared it up for some people.
Sunday, 07 January 2007 03:56
You definitely need to build on this one, Gomi-girl! This short piece has got a helluva lot that's implied but not revealed. Thanks for the explanation you posted, but keep in mind the writer's motto:
show, don't tell.

Please, please, please put all these ideas into story form. You've got a great start here to what could be a much longer work.

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