Blue Sun Room FICTION - ADVENTURE

A River Taken Part 2--Mending The Broken Bird

Sunday, October 22, 2006

here is the conclusion to River being abducted. It's more, to me, about how everybody contends with the things that have been done than anything else. I hope you all enjoy. If you didn't read "A River Taken", you probably shold to get the whole gist of it.....hope you enjoy, and please please please leave feedback, let me know how I'm doing.

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It was the wee hours on Serenity, a time when people used to sleep like stones, a stretch of time now punctuated by screams and sobs.

For all of her shortcomings, the ship had fantastic acoustics, and, couple with a voice that carried in and of itself, everyone heard poor River when the nightmares ripped her out of sleep.

This was the eleventh day since she had been rescued out of a fetish house auction after the crew had essentially torn a town to pieces looking for her. Killing had taken place that evening, but worse than that, the crew of Serenity had been forced to bear witness to one of the nastier sides of the ‘verse.

Simon, who now bunked on the floor of River’s quarters, leapt to his feet from his dead sleep, an ability that mal admired in the doctor, one almost exclusively found in soldiers. He knew the right words, and the right ways to say them, to calm her screams and wild-eyed disorientation down to sobs and babbles.

Inara was there at the door to River’s cabin, as were Wash and Zoë. Mal sauntered over and asked “Same thing?”

“Yeah, I guess it is…..I haven’t seen the pictures Mal, and thanks, but I would just as soon not, but whatever they were doing to her must have hurt,” Wash said.

“I did see them, dearest, and I would expect they did,” Zoë said flatly. “It makes me wish the good Shepherd had the Almighty power of resurrection, so would could bring them……gentlemen back to life and get to killing them all over again.”

Wash never liked to encourage his wife’s unpleasantness like that, so he said nothing at all. Jayne, of course, was absent. He could sleep through a battlefield.

“I’m sorry, but bringing back to life is a trick I leave for higher powers than myself,” Shepherd Book said as he approached River’s cabin.

“Good God, man!” Mal exclaimed. “Would you kindly put yourself together before the poor child sees you and truly enters hysteria!”

“How about before I enter hysteria?” Wash said. He grabbed his wife‘s arm. “Zoë, make the bad man go away!”

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Comments
Sunday, 22 October 2006 07:19
Heyheyhey! It's good to the the conclusion to 'A River Taken'.

I'll be honest, this did not go the way I foresaw. It was more actiony (yes, that's a word now) and less dark and introspectiony (again, it's a word now) than i had anticipated. Still, it was no lesser a read. On the contrary, it was awesome.

I especially loved the last scene between Simon and Kaylee...about time Simon got his foot unplugged frm his mouth...it was perfect, and the Mal's comment just topped it off.

Look forward-greatly-to your next work.
Monday, 23 October 2006 06:28
Wow...gotta agree with BornToFly...not quite how I imagined "A River Taken" wrapping up;)

Definitely loving how you're having the various members of the crew think on and discuss their feelings on what they did to the sick bastards who kidnapped River and did unspeakable things to her. Really shows how they are multi-dimensional and dealing with their own daemons:D

Also liked how you made Millhouse neither a hero nor a villian with his behaviour. He did good work - one hopes - with River but he is also taking advantage of a terrible situation for his own agenda. Really gives OC quotient a factor of realism;)

BEB

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