Blue Sun Room FICTION - ADVENTURE

A River Taken

Sunday, October 15, 2006

here River has been snatched, thought not for the reason everyone thinks. this is a kind of a dark and nasty tale, so joss would approve, i hope, giving a little more insight into the characters, which is what i am really trying to accomplish. These are really such wonderful characters, there are so many stories to be told with them, and I hope you will all indulge me as I meander through my own vision of what further seasons would have been like. As with all of my stories, this takes place between "The message" and the BDM. Please, help me out with feedback.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3265    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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They had his sister.

They were on another pathetic little terraformed moon, like all of the other go-se dumps where the Captain did his business, and they wanted to get off the ship. Just to see something besides the confines of Serenity. Just to eat some real food, however uncultured, just something made with human hands that an animal had to die for. Just to feel dirt under his heels, and even smell horseshit in to road, and most of all to feel the sun on his face.

My God, the thought of smelling horseshit is actually becoming an appealing one to me. How much further am I going to sink before this is all over?

But most of all, Simon wanted a break from Kaylee, however brief it might be. He needed that in the worst way. Simon had grown into a mass of conflicting impulses which got only worse whenever she was around him. Even Inara had no such effect on him. As beautiful and seductive and just plain sexy as Inara was, she was also the closest thing to Simon’s level of culture on board Serenity, and she could conduct herself and converse with him in ways he found so wonderfully familiar, he could sit and enjoy her company all day. Simon, of course, wanted to bed Inara as much as any man ho favored women did, but all he ever really wanted to be was friends with her, to remember his life before.

Kaylee, however, had a very different effect on him. She was so, just, there, so available, so eager to be available to him, it clouded his head. A year or two ago, working on Osiris, living in his vulgarly luxurious apartment, filled with vulgarly luxurious things, he would have had a hard time hiring Kaylee as a maid, but here he was now, studying every curve of her body when she wasn’t watching him, finding excuses to be around her, only to consistently lose his nerve once there and say something infinitely stupid to push her away from him.

But to go to Kaylee’s bed, a path she had all but mapped out for him, for even ten minutes, would be ten minutes he would take his attention from River, and that was the who

Comments
Sunday, 15 October 2006 09:50
Holy Shit. Now THAt is Powerful stuff. Like, scary powerful.

I'm kind of lost for words here...

Kind of a dark and nasty tale indeed...

Rarely, very rarely, do you see fanfic this dark and disturbing. You've got guts my friend, and kudos to you.

This is great not just because it's refreshingly...I don't want to say dark again... but because it's done with style and grace. You speak with as much volume with words as you do without them. Each characters reactions are spot on, I especially like Simon and Jayne here.
Monday, 16 October 2006 10:11
wow...

I can say that in no uncertain terms this is now my most favourite fanfic out there.

I'm a huge fan for the dark, painfull and tragic stories and its a nice change to see one done so well in the Firefly verse.

You have made yourself a fan here. Well done Sir, well done.
Monday, 16 October 2006 16:54
Tian Yesu...that was some of the darkest and deeply emotional fiction I have ever read. And I have read some freaky stuff in my time, browncoatjim! The sheer amount of angst and rage and fear and sadness imbued in this tale definitely gives Joss a run for his money for the prize of the "How far can I take these characters?" contest...and I think that's just brilliant;)

Still...I definitely think a sequel is needed. Not because I think we need to see more acts of sex and ultraviolence (to steal from "A Clockwork Orange")...but to explore how the crew is gonna deal with the aftermath of witnessing such unspeakable horror and committing some of their own. Especially River and Simon. They, I think would be part of the central POV of any future exploration of this storyline, as the acts done to them and by them respectively would be the sources of a lot of soul-searching amongst the BDHs...

BlueEyedBrigadier

P.S. Only reason why I didn't give you a 10? A handful of typographic errors kinda marred the overall package:(

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