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Friday, September 29, 2006

A little Jayne fic while I struggle with the Grey Suits storyline ... feedback would be great - it really helps!

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“I don’t want to!” the little boy cried, stiff-legged in his defiance.

“You gotta,” his mother said.

“Why?” he demanded. “I don’t want to.”

“Neither do I,” she admitted. “But we got no choice. So come on, Matty. We gotta go say goodbye.”

“Why?” the boy asked again, tears beginning to stain his cheeks. “Why can’t he just come home?”

His mother stared at him, then gathered him into her arms, crying her own self. “I wish he could, Matty. Dear God, I wish he could.” She looked at the older boy over the shoulder of her son.

Jayne sat up in his bunk, staring into the shadows, his t-shirt wringing with sweat as if he had just run a mile in full kit, with grenades. He was panting so much he was sure the others would hear. “Gorramit it,” he said quietly.

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Freya stepped over the sill into the dining area, switching on the light as she did so. “Tzao gao,” she said as she realised someone was already sitting at the table.

“Sorry,” Jayne said. “Did I scare ya?”

“Unsettled, shall we say?” Freya headed behind the counter, opening cupboards at random. She smiled at him, then paused in her searching. “You okay?” she asked.

“Yeah. Why?” Jayne lifted the mug in front of him and took a mouthful.

“Well, I'm not sure, but I don’t think you usually drink in the dark. “

“Nope, you ain't wrong.”

“So why are you?”

“Don’t need no light for thinking.”

“Is that what you’re doing?”

Jayne shrugged. “Guess I couldn’t sleep. What’s your excuse?”

“Woke up with the munchies.”

“Not surprised, all the noise you two were making earlier.”

Freya grinned. “We keep you up?”

“No more’n usual.”

She pulled a bag of dried fruit from a drawer and came to sit down next to him. “So what’s up?”

“Nothin’.”

“Jayne, this is me you’re lying to.”

The big man shifted in his seat, as if he were sitting on hot coals. “Ain’t nothing much, anyways.”

“So tell me. It isn’t like we haven’t got the time. We’re taking the long way round to Greenleaf.” Freya opened the bag a

Comments
Friday, 29 September 2006 14:18
Aww, this actually makes me feel sorry for the big brute ... poor Jayne - I never thought those words would come out of my ... fingers ...

But this was well written and a completely believable black story.

Now, about this gray suits storyline you speak of ... ?
Friday, 29 September 2006 18:15
How funny, the events that shape a man, that lead him down certain paths in his life.

Believable and well done.
Friday, 29 September 2006 18:39
That's an awesome story, I really enjoyed it. I run a Serenity RP, and would love to use this background for Jayne. May I use it? I would give you full credit.
Friday, 29 September 2006 19:34
You know...there's always been some debate about Jayne's background in these parts. Some wanna go your route and have him with a loving family that needs supporting after something bad happened. Others...they wanna make him the son of a drunken hundan who only showed Jayne the evils of humanity. Personally? I don't think either scenario really explains the nature of one Jayne Cobb. Something more along the lines of this (Jayne with a loving family but with a darkness that's not really explainable) suits the situation better;)

BEB
Monday, 01 October 2007 16:37
I agree with what BEB says about Jayne's background with family. I think it would take a strong mother to give Jayne his good qualities, while leaving home at an early age would explain Jayne's semi-civilized behavior. Also, being witness to (or participating in) a situation that forced him to leave home gives Jayne a motivation to keep to himself and be the mercenary. All in all, a satisfying one-shot story.

:-)

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