VIOLENT HEART (Chpt. 4)
Sunday, May 18, 2003
An incident on a trade planet induces some strange changes in Jayne, and they have quite the effect on Kaylee, putting her in the line of fire when things turn violent. *SORRY THIS ONE TOOK SO LONG*
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RATING: 9.0 (NC17)
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Violent Heart
Chapter Four: Hard Burn
rated R/17 *lemon warning & a itty-bitty Heart of Gold spoiler.*
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1.
While Serenity's insides cooled down to a soft simmer, Jayne's fever was heating up. He figured ain't no one noticed it really getting bad, except himself.
And it was probably just as well that he and Kaylee hadn't gotten down to talking much about current developments. Which was just fine with Jayne. Not much good at talking anyway. Not much use for it in a situation like this. She had come to his bed every night for the past three days. Been awhile since he had that kind of attention unpaid for and unasked.
Wasn't about to question it. But he found it a might strange that she hadn't had the mind to.
Something wasn't quite right with all this when you got down to the bottom of it.
He sat there in his bunk, itching at something under his skin. He looked down at the figure curled up in his sheets, asleep. Her breathing was slow and long. Lost to the world.
Okay. So maybe he was questioning it a little. What was she doing there with him? There was this clear memory of the two of them staring at each other across a dirty table in a saloon on Outpost 10. It was the only image left in his head from that night that was coherent in the least. Hell if he knew what had gotten into her that night, 'cept a heap of trouble.
And when she woke up this morning would he be out of her system? Or would she come to him again later that night?
Without a careful thought of waking her up, he threw off the covers and got out of bed. It came with a learning that little Kaylee slept even heavier than the dead. She told him that she'd never felt so rested in her life sleeping there in his bunk.
He turned to look at his reflection in a dingy little mirror that hung on the wall, a irritated growl caught in his throat. He scratched at it.
Restful sleep, his ass. She'd had nightmares every night since. He hadn't brought himself to mention them. Didn't seem she
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 18 May 2003 21:38
BC
That was strange but I think Jayne needs to get himself to the infirmary and get checked out. It sounds like he picked up a virus or something at Outpost 10 besides getting his brain turned to mush.
Here's another thought for everyone. Do you realize that 'joss' in Chinese translates to luck.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 19 May 2003 00:55
It's been so long since I read the first chapter, that I went back and reread all of it posted so far to get the back into the 'feel' of the drama. No surprise that the story still holds up for me. :) I'm very interested in where this will end up, how the crew will deal with it when it comes to light, and love that you tied in Jaynes watching her surgery which to me was a lovely silent moment between 2 people in that ep...even tho one of the was unaware of it. :) Finish soon, please!
Tuesday, 20 May 2003 18:03
perfect.
Tuesday, 20 May 2003 18:03
perfect.
Thursday, 22 May 2003 06:30
I hated the whole Kaylee/Jayne thing to start with, but you are convincing me.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 27 May 2003 17:27
I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE, LOVE these Violent Heart pieces. How much longer do I have to wait until your next piece?? Don't hurry it (but if you could?)
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 30 May 2003 13:41
DesertDragon, please write more. PLEASE!!! I know that you're working but I need this. PLEASE!!!!!!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 30 May 2003 20:43
It's been 13 days since Ch. 4 posted. When can I expect the rest of this storyline? Please.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 06 July 2003 20:47
When's chapter 5 coming?!?!?! Jaynes sick! Kaylee may be in danger!! Mals on the war path!! I'm running out of both breath to hold and exclamation points!! We need another chapter NOW! Dong ma? :D
Wednesday, 14 January 2004 18:12
Absolutely fantastic--I want to cry because I have to wait for more!! Can't rush genius, though..I know *whimper*
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 09 July 2004 22:13
It's a *mite* hot in here, not might. ;-)
!!!!!! OH NO! !!!!!!! heeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! and JAYNE IS SICK! omg! somebody notice that!
JAZMYN
Friday, 04 February 2005 08:42
u have to leave us hanging dont u ?
well i cant wait to read the next in a second and is mal going to find janye and kaylee? lol
jazz
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 23 October 2005 23:50
"She wanted him inside her. All that strength that she so desperately wanted for herself. She wanted it all from him. Now." Gorram fecking HOT! Moisture factor up into the red. But it weren't just the sex, (did I just say "just" and "sex" in the same sentence?) but the true to life voices. Loved Kaylee being vulnerable to Jayne and Jayne wanting so badly to help her, love her, without being able to know he really DOES love her. Yeah. This was shiny and loveyfying and if you don't write more for us and more and more, there might just be a revolt that'll make Serenity valley look like a homecoming bonfire.
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