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Jayne's Kid

Thursday, September 7, 2006

A standalone story in my 'verse set after Miranda, where Freya is Mal's lover, and Hank his pilot. Feedback would be good!

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3927    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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“A kid?” Jayne sat back in his chair and stared at Mal.

“That’s what they said.” Mal Reynolds glared at his crew member. “You care to shed any light on this eventuality?”

“I ain't got no kids.”

“That you know of,” Hank put in. “Hell, Jayne, you’ve been sleeping your way across the system from one side to the other." He grinned. "There must be a whole passel of little Cobbs out there by now.”

“Well, there ain't!” Jayne growled. “I’m always careful.”

“You?” Hank couldn’t believe his ears. “You’re careful?”

“Sure I am. Don’t want no woman coming after me demanding money to look after no kid.”

“Well, it doesn’t look like you were careful enough this time,” Mal pointed out, his arms crossed, radiating contained irritation. “Wants to meet you.”

“Meet me?” Jayne looked stunned, like he’d been hit between the eyes with a cattle prod. “You mean it ain’t a baby?”

“Apparently not. From the sounds of it, he’s about fourteen.” Mal shook his head. “We going to have more of these turning up, do you think?”

“I … I don’t know, Mal,” Jayne stammered. “I’d’a said there weren’t a snowball’s chance in hell of there being even one out there –“

“Why? You firing blanks?” Hank asked.

Jayne started to get up. “You wanna take it outside, little man?” he growled.

“No,” Mal said. Just one word, but the tone of his voice had Jayne sitting back in his chair.

“I can check,” Simon suggested diffidently. “If you like. A DNA test would prove if this boy is Jayne’s son.”

“Son?” Jayne said. “A boy?”

“That’s what they said,” Mal confirmed.

A different look spread across Jayne’s face. “Never thought I’d have me a son.”

“How easy is it, doc?” Mal asked. “This test.”

“DNA? I only need a sample from each and it’s … just a few minutes.”

Mal nodded. “Right. Well, the boy’s on Jangyin, so it’s not that far out of our way.” He looked at Hank. “Appears we’ll be taking a slight detour on our way to Greenleaf. Best let Zoe know we’ll be late picking them up.”

“Yes sir.

Comments
Thursday, 07 September 2006 14:33
What a wonderfully written story! Crisp, deliberate use of language, just enough description, good pacing and excellent characterization.

I love that you used the occasion to show us a deeper and more caring side of the big Merc, and that, for once, mal was supportive and affirming. Just goes to show that sometimes the family we choose are as important as those we're born into.

Your profile says you're a Mal fan, but I hope you'll give us some more tales centered on Jayne, too. You've got a great touch with him.
Thursday, 07 September 2006 16:12
Thanks, hisgoodgirl! This one kinda wrote itself, so I hoped others might like it! As you say, I am a Mal fan, but I'll try to let the Muse come over Jayne again ...
Thursday, 07 September 2006 19:21
Damn fine piece of work. It showed one of those rare gentler moments of Jayne's character.
Friday, 08 September 2006 06:55
Bravo! *applauds*
The premise, the execution, the boy's name, the twist, Jayne being noble... The list of positives just goes on and on.
Fan-ruttin'-tastic. I loved it.
Sunday, 10 September 2006 21:11
Well now...gotta admit I was mighty impressed with how you handled things here, Jane0904. Definitely loved how you had Jayne lie to Simon in order to preserve his mother's memory and give them both (Jayne and Simon Cobb) something to hold and treasure for the rest of their lives:D

BEB
Saturday, 23 September 2006 13:55
What a wonderful and original story! I thoroughly enjoyed this view and thought all your characters were spot on. This feels like it could have been straight out of the series. Thanks for sharing!
Monday, 19 February 2007 12:56
aw! this is really sweet. love seein this side to jayne!
Wednesday, 26 September 2007 16:32
It's good to see a bit more about Jayne and I like the way this played out. As far as constructive criticism, I'm not sure Mal would make that comment at the end about being a Cobb. Then again, since you've got Freya and Hank in the mix, you are rolling these characters down a new path. I just feel like Mal would be supportive toward Jayne like he was at the end of Jaynestown but he'd keep a bit of space and wait to see what Jayne would say. That last word in this story really belonged to Jayne.

This was fun to read, and I'll keep reading for sure!

:-)
Wednesday, 04 March 2009 15:49
Awwww! I loved this to pieces! It was so heart-warming and I love soft!Jayne so gorram much.

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