It's building slowly for a reason. Mostly because I'm a fan of drama and like to keep people wondering.
The first four 'days' can be found here:
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12740>Day 1.
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12741>Day 2.
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12753>Day 3.
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12783>Day 4.
Thanks to Tamsibling for the beta.
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The Prisoner
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- Day 5 -
Simon could feel his strength fading each time they deposited him into the dark cell. He knew several ribs were bruised badly, and he didn’t even want to see the multi-colored bruises that he knew, just by sensitivity to touch, dotted his skin. He was cold and he trembled despite himself.
His fellow prisoner was silent, as he was most of the time when Simon returned from his ‘interrogation’.
Simon felt himself drifting into an uneasy sleep just as the lights in the cell flashed on, blinding him momentarily. He flung his hands up to his eyes to cover them, as the light was so bright it pierced his closed lids.
But no sooner had the lights flashed on, did they disappear and Simon sank back against the wall, exhausted and concerned that he had still not been questioned.
“They will break you before they even begin to question you,” came a soft voice from the corner of the room.
Simon’s head lolled to one side as he regarded his cell-mate in the darkness. “I can’t help them.”
“What do you have that they can possibly want?”
Simon could hear the disbelieving tone in the other man’s voice, and even in the dark, could picture his eyebrows raised and a smirk curling his lips at what the Alliance could possibly want with someone like him.
Simon thought about his answer for a long moment before responding. “Nothing. I literally have nothing.” Nothing in the form of material things. But those, as he had learned over the last year, were not so important. He
-Danny
I feel like this day is a little weak though. I had to read the Mal/Inara/Kaylee section a few times to work it out, and I still can't picture it. I don't know where they are, who's there, etc... there's a few little grammatical things too.
I know, I'm picky. It's only because you're such a good writer and I love you so! :) But short bits are very tricky. Every word is important in setting the scene and the mood - you've got that with Simon, but not so much the scene on Serenity.
Really good stuff you got here.
Waiting on Day 6.
Mal stared after her, sighing. “It never is.”~~ Awwww, Leia! Poor Mal. This is so perfect and so sad. Portrays perfectly how our Cap'n can't catch a break, can't ever be quite enough right to get the job done. I hate it, but I know it's the way the 'verse is to this man who's our hero. Sigh.
Nice job from Part 1 to Part 5. How long must I wait for more?
I hope that nothing happens too bad to Simon (although he does need to be toughened up)
River slitting Mal's throat in his sleep = wonderful mental image.
This was a great chapter, Leiasky! A bit on the short side, and Kaylee's behaviour stayed just on the safe side of being OOC...but I am really enjoying the scenario you've developed here:D
Gotta admit though...Kaylee's got a point going. Planning's all well and good...but they would be at it for ages to get all the angles down. Simon would be dead or a drooling vegetable by then;)
BEB
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