Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

SEEN BETTER DAYS - PROLOGUE & PART 1

Tuesday, September 5, 2006

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3158    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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I would like to thank, all the shiny browncoats who helped me produce this fanfic. My hat's off to you guys and gals, couldn't do it without you.

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The long dusty road unrolled ahead of her, the clouds of red clay swirling in her wake. Ahead of her the path she had chosen to follow. Behind her the road she vowed never to travel again.

A gentle breeze picked up, moving auburn locks of hair across her face, like barriers blocking the path of her future. The sun beat down on her back, burning its way through her shirt, to the scars that laid beneath. All the signs of this man-made world cried out, in an attempt to keep her from changing the future.

Her eyes glanced upward toward the light blue sky, a few clouds were in sight. A firefly class vessel appeared from the horizon, venturing towards her. Its hull glistening in the sunlight. Slowing down, it hovered for a moment above Dashdown Docks before making a steep descent and disappearing out of view.

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“Everyone strap in. We’re coming in to land,” Mal ordered over the com to the crew. Pushing a few buttons, he helped River prepare Serenity for docking. She had sucessfully proven to him that she was a capable pilot, but had yet to prove her skill to dock the ship.

“She’s all yours,” Mal commented, releasing control of the ship to her. He leaned back into the pilots chair, watching with a careful eye River’s movements.

“No Faith. No Belief. No trust, ” River rambled, gripping the controls and pressing several buttons.

“I believe you can do it,” Mal tried to encourage her, knowing that she knew better than he did, he couldn’t land Serenity in one piece.

They don’t,” River replied, veering Serenity towards the docks. River maneuvered Serenity with such grace, however her landing technique left much to be desired. She'd gleaned her ability to fly by watching Wash, but had always been ushered off the bridge during the landing sequence.

Serenity began to buck and jump, as River pul

Comments
Tuesday, 05 September 2006 04:03
BRILLIANT!!! All I need now is the next 200 parts and I'll be happy :)
Tuesday, 05 September 2006 04:30
Read the begining and the end and it was pretty shiney!!


Tuesday, 05 September 2006 10:08
Intriguing, especially with the notion at the beginning that the future could be changed. JD seems like a fun addition but who is the new pilot? Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 05 September 2006 11:33
Good start here Jorja.

I like you're new characters and Mal's interaction with the little boy was great.

Good voices of the BDH's also.

Looking forward to the next installment.
Tuesday, 05 September 2006 15:30
good stuff this.
SIMONSTER
Tuesday, 05 September 2006 15:34
i've not read many of these fan fics before but i have to say, yours is something else! easily as good if not better than anything published that i've read.

keep 'em comin'
Tuesday, 05 September 2006 19:00
Another great one Jorja! I loved the opening and the little scene between Kaylee and Simon at the end was perfect. I can't wait to meet the new pilot. Keep them coming. Please!
Wednesday, 06 September 2006 14:43
So, is the other one on pause or just scrapped altogether ??

There are some very funny lines here, and I am waiting to see where you go with this, taking away River's pilot status and all. :-\
Tuesday, 12 September 2006 13:34
Well done! Very in character.

I liked River's landing. With all that's been written for River, this strikes the closest to home.

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