The Prisoner: Day 4/10
Monday, September 4, 2006
Simon inches closer to finding out why he is not being questioned and Kaylee does some questioning of her own.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3189 RATING: 9.0 (PG) SERIES: FIREFLY
It's building slowly for a reason. Mostly because I'm a fan of drama and like to keep people wondering.
The first three 'days' can be found here:
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12740>Day 1.
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12741>Day 2.
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12753>Day 3.
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The Prisoner
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- Day 4 -
“What do they want with me?” Simon asked as he lay panting on the floor after yet another round of beatings. It was getting harder and harder to get up after each one. “They don’t ask me questions.”
“Weaken your prisoner before interrogating him,” came the cryptic response.
“That’s – helpful.” Simon groaned as he pushed himself into a seated position and leaned back against the stone wall. The welts on his skin burned but contact with the cold stone was somewhat soothing.
“That’s the truth of it.”
“Lie to me once in a while, then.” Simon winced as he touched a particularly sensitive rib.
There was no way Simon could see the smirk that spread across the other man’s face. “You wouldn’t want me to do that.”
Simon had learned to hate his cell-mate’s responses almost as much as he hated his captor’s silence.
“Try me.”
~*~
“Why’d you take off? Why’d you leave ‘im?” Kaylee asked as she stood on the bridge, watching River input coordinates into Serenity’s navigation controls.
“The needs of the many outweighed the needs of the one.”
“He’s your brother!” Kaylee had tinkered with everything possible since Simon had been taken. Inara and Mal had both assured her that they would go back from him, but she wanted to hear it from River herself.
River’s fingers hovered over the nav controls as she hesitated, struggling with emotion she tried to contain for the greater good of the mission – and Mal’s plan. “Yes. He is.”
“Then why didn’t you –“
River’s head slowly swiveled toward Kaylee’s and the younger girl’s breath caught at the angry lo
That's...ominous.
It seems it would be easiest if Mal, Zoe and River sat Kaylee down and explained: this is why we left, this is what we're doing now, and this is how it's going to help the plan. Doling it out in bits and pieces as Kaylee loses it with each crew member seems inefficient (although totally in Mal's character to do so. Tracy, anyone?)
I just had a nasty thought of what they're actually doing to Simon and his cell mate, but I want to see what you do first...if I'm wrong, I might save it for a story myself.
I agree with MG - it is totally in Mal's character to keep the crew in the dark, but poor Kaylee - you'd think he'd give her a clue!
-Danny
“Lie to me once in a while, then.” Simon winced as he touched a particularly sensitive rib. *good description here.
“The needs of the many outweighed the needs of the one.” *A little bit of "star trek" eh? Good line and very well placed.
Angry tears slipped out of Kaylee’s eyes, dampening dirt-stained cheeks. It had been days. Days and nights filled with worry, regret and more than a little anger. She held her breath after asking, “When are we going for him?” *I have no trouble imagining Kaylee in anger, mostly because of the way you have wrote her in this, very good.
“I eat when they beat you.” *ooooo, good line here, adds to the suspense of Simon's location.
Good job here Leiasky, looking forward to day 5.
Sorry, but I really want to slap Kaylee and tell her to do something useful. Or else shut the hell up while the rest of them do the rescue!
But that's just me. :)
I feel bad that I laughed at that. Oh well
I loved the prisoner's convo with Simon, though I must confess I don't have a clue in 7 hells who he might be. He talks a mite like Jayne, has got big hands and has a kind streak in him. Book maybe? I dunno.
Thanks for this. Write on, Baby, I'm waiting.
~Great line.
Did I tell you yet that I like this story Leia ??
Really loving how you are putting both Simon and Kaylee through the ringer with this scenario, Leiasky! Definitely loving how Simon isn't realizing that his cell-mate's the real interregator (at least I think that), though I am fence-sitting on whether Kaylee's right about being kept in the dark by Mal, Zoe and River...or she's just being too whiny for her own good;)
BEB
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