It's building slowly for a reason. Mostly because I'm a fan of drama and like to keep people wondering.
The first two 'days' can be found here:
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12740>Day 1.
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12741>Day 2.
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The Prisoner
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- Day 3 -
“Why are you here?” Simon asked, squinting in the direction he now knew the voice and body of his cell-mate to be.
“I committed a crime.”
“Oh, is that all?” Simon’s voice dripped sarcasm.
The man’s deep voice rumbled as a chuckle escaped his lips. “I like you, boy. No doubt they will not.”
Simon ignored the familiar tone of the man’s voice and instead latched onto something he’d said. “Who are they ?”
Silence greeted his question.
“Alliance?”
“In some form or another, perhaps.”
Simon wondered about that answer for a long time, until a stone door slid open and he was dragged out of the room, still under cover of darkness.
The man left behind only sighed.
~*~
Simon tried to look around the dark room as his wrists and ankles were bound. He was cold but the rough treatment heated his skin quicker than he thought possible and he welcomed it until the first, sharp lash struck his back.
A surprised gasp escaped his mouth but he clenched it tight as two more quick strokes brought the lash once again into contact with sensitive skin. Tears pricked his eyes but he clamped them shut until he felt the pad of a finger trace down the lithe muscles of his chest.
“Why are you doing this?” he asked and the finger stopped at the waistband of his pants.
He could barely make out the silhouette standing before him, dark as it was and he could not tell if the finger touching him belonged to a man or a woman. Only later, when his question was answered with a sharp punch to the gut, did Simon figure such a painful strike could be delivered by a man.
After untold minutes of voicing his questions and receiving n
This bit really moved me:
"He could see Kaylee fight to keep control of her anger. He knew, from experience he’d prefer to forget, that it was sometimes easier to be angry, than to cry for something lost. Mal rested his hands on her shoulder and with as much certainty as he could force into his voice, said, “We’ll get him back, mei mei. I promise you.”
It was the one and only promise Malcolm Reynolds had ever made that he knew, with a certain unnerving finality, he would die to keep."
Really, really good. This chapter was short, but it hit me in the heart, which is the difference between good fanfic and generic "crew member A gets kidnapped/arrested and the others have to rescue him" fanfic.
A surprised gasp escaped his mouth but he clenched it tight as two more quick strokes brought the lash once again into contact with sensitive skin. Tears pricked his eyes but he clamped them shut until he felt the pad of a finger trace down the lithe muscles of his chest.*Good description here of a whipping, and the pad of a finger(good words there).
He groaned loudly when his bonds were cut and he fell in a pained heap to the cold, stone floor. A few more well placed strikes to his back and ribs left him gasping as they dragged him back to his cell. *"pained heep" I like that description too.
I really like the way you're posting this, sometimes, in long fics, people will lose interest after an episode or two. As a reader, I'm eagerly anticpating the next chapters, and know they'll be coming soon.
There's a little sadistic side of me that loves to see Simon in pain, even though he's my favourite character.
God I want more of this story, and not just cause of Simon.
And Mal's commitment to Kaylee is spot on for his character and their relationship. I want to see more!
Gotta admit though...really enjoying the screws you're turning against Simon. Boy need to build some character;)
BEB
Okay. I'm still loving the little-by-little approach to enlightenment on what's going on. The beating? Scary and good. I ain't a Simon-girl, but I cringed with sorrow for him here. Mal assuring Kaylee they'll go back for Simon? Excellent too. All believable, all great writing, baby.
It was the one and only promise Malcolm Reynolds had ever made that he knew, with a certain unnerving finality, he would die to keep.
~More good Mal determination.
I am going to disagree with ShadowLeopard up there, at least on his first guess. I know you like to stick to canon, which means Book is long past dead. It could be The Operative, though the tinge of awe from the last day tells me that the stranger didn't know about that happening, which the Operative obviously did. :)
Who is the mystery cell mate?
Who are the mystery whip lashers?
Who will save our dearest Simon?
I guess I'll just have to go to day 4 to find out.
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