I'll try and post these two at a time because they're so short.
The first 'day' can be found here:
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12740> Day 1.
Thanks to Tamsibling for the beta!
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The Prisoner
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- Day 2 -
Simon awoke in a cell; dark and damp and cold. He trembled as he wrapped his arms around himself, trying desperately to rub some heat into his skin. He was bare to the waist. Left only with the cargo pants he’d donned that morning – or seemingly that morning as there was no concept of time in this dark place.
He pushed himself to a seated position with some difficulty, as his muscles, tense from the shock delivered to his system that knocked him unconscious, began to relax.
“I wouldn’t scuffle about too much. They don’t like a lot of movement.”
Simon’s head whirled around and his eyes struggled to adjust to the darkness. He’d heard the voice, but couldn’t place the direction from which it had come.
“Where am I?” Simon asked, his voice rough from disuse.
“Hell.”
Simon slumped against the wall, exhaling a deep breath and closing his eyes. “Back so soon?” he asked the shadows, “I thought it was only one visit per lifetime.”
The man chuckled deeply at the newest prisoner’s sarcasm. “You’d know if you’d been to hell and back, boy.”
A familiarity tingled in the back of Simon’s mind, but he dismissed it. “I think facing down a room full of Reavers and living to tell the tale constitutes as traveling to hell and back.”
There was a tinge of awe in the invisible man’s voice. “I see.”
“Believe me, I wish I hadn’t.” Simon said as he pushed himself to his feet and stumbled around in the darkness, feeling the sides of the stone wall for any lever that would at least turn on some light, if not open a doorway to freedom.
~*~
“We’ll get him back, Kaylee,” Inara said as the girl sat rigid on Inara’s bed. The Companion drew a brush through her unkept hair, trying to soothe the upset mechanic.
“Cap’n ain’
And now Simon's hearing things (or another prisoner). Can they dig out? This is feeling very Count of Monte Cristo. And since I like that book, that's cool.
He'll prove himself to her though. I just have a feeling about that!
Oddly, I don't like the idea of Kaylee losing faith in Mal so fast. I'd imagine she'd be an emotional wreck, and I don't think she's acting how I'd expect her to act.
Oh, and please don't let the ending be a gung-ho kill all the Alliance bad guys kind of thing, unless it's clever. Even then, be careful. You're treading on unoriginal ice here.
I'm going on, aren't I?
I agree that I can see the "Count of Monte Cristo" parallel, but having beta'd it, I also know how it ends ... I am looking forward to day 3!
...from my ten floor tenement
Where once our bodies lay
How I long to hear you say
"No, they'll never catch me now
No, they'll never catch me
No, they cannot catch me now
We will escape somehow
Somehow."
...
And at the gate of the embassy
Our hands met through the bars
As your whisper stilled my heart
"No, they'll never catch me now
No, they'll never catch me
No, they cannot catch me now
We will escape somehow
Somehow."
its sad seeing Kaylee loose faith in Mal.
Thanks for the comments everyone. Hope you continue to enjoy the further into the story we get.
A familiarity tingled in the back of Simon’s mind, but he dismissed it. “I think facing down a room full of Reavers and living to tell the tale constitutes as traveling to hell and back.” *I like you tying this to the BDM, very good.
“Have faith, Kaylee,” Inara set the brush down and embraced the distraught mechanic from behind. “Malcolm Reynolds doesn’t give up that easily.” *So true and very well written.
I do like how you written Kaylee, she would be very distressed at the loss of Simon, and even though Inara's comment was meant to comfort, I do think she might have a crisis of faith in the captain.
--love that one!
I agree that Kaylee should have more faith in Mal. He earned that lifting River up off the floor of the bar on Maidenhead. However, she is griefstricken and worried and probably not thinking too clearly. I'm guessing she'll come around.
You're back and better than ever, Leiasky:D
BEB
Lovely Kayleeness. You're a great writer, Leia. Spacie's right. Nice to see an author do good works without it being pornified. Too many other good writers seem to be unable to write 4 words without sexifyin' things up.
“Malcolm Reynolds doesn’t give up that easily.”
~So very damn true, he's a hard one to beat.
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