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SHADOWS PUPPETS - Teaser

Thursday, June 10, 2004

MAL’S PAST AND RIVER’S PRESENT SEEM TO HAVE MORE IN COMMON THAN FIRST BELIEVED.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2764    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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SHADOWS PUPPETS

By Shayz

EPISODE TEASER

FADE IN:

INT. SERENITY – MAL’S BUNK – NIGHT

MAL wakes with a start, a bit sweaty. There’s a rustle next to him against the wall. He rolls his head to the side surprised SEEING: RIVER under the covers, smiling at him, chin resting on her hand, looking very sweet and innocent.

RIVER: Someone’s coming.

Mal (confused, terrified: what the hell is she doing here?) tumbles off the bunk and hits the floor hard, face down. He rolls onto his back and looks up into: A GORGEOUS BLUE SKY – wispy white clouds, sunshine...

EXT. SHADOW (PLANET)– REYNOLD’S RANCH – ROUND HORSE PEN - DAY – CONTINUING

Dreamy, unbelievable blue sky and bright sunshine. It’s “Little House on the Prairie” Reynold’s style; lots of cattle, big acreage, big house. Off Stage (OS) a horse can be heard “laughing” horse-like. Mal sits up; he’s in the dirt of the training ring just outside a large, rustic barn. He looks around SEEING: A beautiful wild STALLION prancing along the rounded fence line, having just bucked Mal from its back. A very happy horse right about now.

MAL: Tamade húndàn!

MRS. REYNOLDS (OS): Malcolm! What did I say about that sort of talk?

Mal gets up, makes a face as he dusts himself off, then:

MAL: Sorry Ma.

MRS. REYNOLDS (OS): Leave that (trans: evil humping piece of dog meat) alone and get back to your chores. I’m gonna be a might sore you don’t get ‘em stables raked ‘for sundown.

Like a 12 year-old kid, Mal kicks the dirt and mutters as he stomps toward the barn. (NOTE: Mal is OUR Mal taking the place of his kid-self.)

INT. BARN – CONTINUING

Mal enters and grabs a rake SEEING: River dancing in the barn: a little ballet, a little twirl. She sees Mal and gives him a grand curtsy.

RIVER: Don’t look now…someone’s coming.

Mal turns around (180 degrees) He’s now—

INT. REYNOLD’S HOUSE – FOYER – CONTINUING

— kneeling near a wall, peeking around the corner into the foyer, listening to Ms. Reynolds talk to MR. HALLADAY

Comments
Thursday, 10 June 2004 03:00
Acckkkkkk! Hell of a Teaser. Normally dislike reading fic in screenplay format but you seem to have mastered the style!!!! I wanna know what happens!
Thursday, 10 June 2004 05:35
I liked it!

Very interesting beginning.
Thursday, 10 June 2004 05:36
I liked it!

Very interesting beginning.
Thursday, 10 June 2004 18:13
Loved this to bits, what a wonderful teaser! And did it remind anyone else in parts of the recurring message in blood from the excellent gorram tv series "American Gothic" saying *someone's at the door*? Mighty fine myth, keep writing! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 07 November 2005 08:07
That was cool man! Agree on the enjoyable screen play read. Wash waking up Jayne... hehehehee.... too damn funny!

Let me know when you've got more. Looking forward to see where this is going.

-Blake
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 19 December 2005 20:41
Thanks was good, river is being creppy but I can take it
Tuesday, 02 January 2007 15:37
Lovely piece, but I have to say: fantastic take on Wash.

"MAL: Zoe, get our suits prepped. Wash, wake Jayne.

WASH: Me? Wh..Why me? I can get the suits prepped. I’d really like to get the suits, Mal."

Hilarious, really could be out of the show.

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