Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

Shivers

Wednesday, August 16, 2006

Follows 'Tingles'; still just fluff. Rayne, PG13.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3697    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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This took me awhile, it wouldn't cooperate with me (and I'm not completely pleased with it). Still really just fluff. Not much of the 'more' some requested . . . sorry . . .

Disclaimer; characters and ‘verse not mine, Joss’s. Not even the title’s mine, it’s just_unravel’s.

Rating: PG13

Shivers (The Ride Back)

River felt stretched when she slid down from S-something’s back outside the small store where the hitching post was situated. She took experimental steps, testing her inner thigh muscles. And her equilibrium; being near Jayne, letting him do what he had been doing, had made her dizzy. And now, moving away from him, she felt off-balance. Unsure of herself, which she’d recently become unaccustomed to feeling.

If she thought about it, she could still feel Jayne’s hands on her. Her tactile sensory apparatus must be malfunctioning, because he was no longer touching her. Frowning in concentration, she bent over and lifted her skirt up far enough to see if her sense of vision was also faulty. No, she saw nothing abnormal on her abdomen.

“Wei*!” For the second time today, Jayne grabbed her arm roughly. He yanked her skirt down around her legs while glancing up and down the street that only held the four of them. “What ya tryin’ ta do, draw all kinds of unsavory-like attention? Can’t be liftin’ yer skirt like that in public.”

Mal had caught Jayne’s action, and he watched as River narrowed her eyes at Jayne, then conversely grinned cheekily. With Zoë, the captain was unloading saddlebags and more-or-less agreed with what his mercenary had said, so thought little of the exchange. He might have thought otherwise if he’d known how pleasured River felt at the merc’s nearness. Or if he’d still been looking when Jayne said, “hey,” again, and reached to pull River’s skirt back up.

Jayne crouched down on his boot heels. Yep, he’d seen what he’d thought he’d seen. He stood back up to tower over River.

“Why didn’t ya tell me yer skin was gettin’ rub

Comments
Wednesday, 16 August 2006 05:43
Oh My!!! when they were on the horse i just happened to be listening to a sensual song and that added to the mood quite nicely. i think i need to catch my breath. i like these. i like these ALOT! i love that she already has a couple of his shirts. brings back fond memories. *sigh* ... I'll be in my bunk!
Wednesday, 16 August 2006 16:45
Oh, icebreather, you and I are going to be friends I can tell ... I absolutely LOVE your Rayne ... although River's voice is throwing me a bit ... I don't remember her ever sounding quite so analytical except when she was really off her rocker.

But I still love the way you're portraying them, and their burgeoning relationship - who knew applying ointment could be so damn sexy ... please keep adding to this little series!
COUNTESSMARY
Friday, 18 August 2006 18:13
Wonderfully written. You seemed to have captured just this feeling that's sensual and not sexual, but in a good way.
Friday, 18 August 2006 22:00
I think I'm about done with these, there doesn't seem to be much more than these two in my head . . . but thanks for the R&Rs, I very much appreciate them!
Saturday, 19 August 2006 04:53
What? Noo! You can't just leave off here! That's Fox-ing us (aka doing like Fox and giving us a taste of the good stuff before canning it) royally!

Still...your work certainly does inspire some wonderful plot pathways;D

BEB
Tuesday, 06 March 2007 20:06
Fox-ing, lol. Gotta agree with BEB here, that was too fantastic to leave us hanging. There's really no more? :-(

But seriously, I did really enjoy that. I like how you can mix things up a bit with the sensuality but still keep the sweetness in portraying how the two are growing closer. And a special mention for River's "boob" line, it made me lol.

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