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The Operative Part 4: More or Lester

Friday, July 14, 2006

How in the 'verse will the Operative get his memory back? All is revealed...

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2771    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Lester Haughton jumped lightly down from the vehicle and waved to the nice Alliance troopers who had kindly given him a lift from the local Alliance complex from which he had just retired. Switching his compact black holdall from one hand to the other, he slowly turned a full circle, taking in the bustling Border Planet Commercial Docks that surrounded him. It was still fairly early in the morning, so they were not quite as crowded as usual, but there were still hundreds of people striding purposefully to and from ships and buildings. The docks were a little shabby, but that could be expected, few respectable ships and even fewer cruise liners ventured as far into the black as the Border Planets, such as Persephone, where Lester was heading, to begin what he hoped would be a peaceful, if a little lonely retirement. Lester had no family. All his blood relatives were dead, and he was an only child. He had been married, long ago, but his wife and two sons had been killed in a freak ship crash. The blurry memory caused a small stab of sadness in his chest, followed by a rumble in his stomach, reminding him loudly that he hadn’t eaten for hours.

He could dwell on the past later. He had to find a ship willing to take him to Persephone, but first, and foremost, he had to find something to eat. Catching sight of a narrow, seclude alley, he ventured into the unnatural twilight caused by the overhanging balconies on the surrounding buildings. It was common knowledge, that if a traveller wanted a decent meal, the best bars could be found off the beaten path on the back streets of the docks.

He had not reached halfway down the alley, when a coarse, heavily muscled arm slid around his throat, and the sharp blade of a knife rested coldly against the base of his throat. A rough unshaven cheek brushed his, and a gruff voice rasped in his ear. “Hand over the bag, nice an’ slow, like. Don’t be makin’ any sudden movements, and I won’t have to kill yer.”

Lester froze for a fraction of a second before his subconscious took over.

Comments
Saturday, 15 July 2006 05:13
Ok, like so many other fanfic's of this theme I'm automatically a fan. I love speculation on Book's past and so I truly enjoyed reading this. My only complaint is that it seems "stiff." Taking a guess (and I could be easily wrong) it seems like there's a lack of self-trust. It's almost too objective, too detached from Book and what his journey is. Regardless I loved the fact that some elements are really coming together (Book-->Operative-->Lester-->Book). Good stuff. Would be interested to read the next chapter.
Saturday, 15 July 2006 06:08
Well now...I see you took up Book's comment on flying on a Firefly before his tenure onboard Serenity, Smart...blonde;)

Gotta agree with ECAmber though...things were a tad too clinical and removed from what Book probably would have been feeling right then and there. But maybe that's the point...his old life seemed like something foreign and separate to him, even after getting his memories back;)

BEB
Saturday, 15 July 2006 18:04
ECA: If you mean I have a lack of self-trust, then you're dead on. This is the longest thing I've ever written, and I was nervous as to how it would turn out, thanks for the criticism though, I know where to improve next time now. :)
Sunday, 16 July 2006 05:21
I really liked the way you had him gain back his memory. "The more he read, the more the memory grew, and blossomed, sending out shoots and tendrils into his brain, overshadowing and strangling what he had believed was his life."->I really liked this line alot, if the rest was a little stiff this line sort of made it flow better. Nice as always!

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